Longevity begins with a dog

Finish this testimonial
It's finally over.

I’ve been reading it roughly over the past few days while practicing.

Without further ado, review first.

1. Serious lack of details

The characters are unclear, the supporting roles are too few, and the description of the environment is superficial.

2. Daily and branch lines, basically none
Although the story is not very interesting in the later stages, it basically advances the main plot and is full of practical information. It is tiring and boring to read.

Looking back, there are many places that could actually be lengthened and some small events added to make the story look fuller.

For example, when Xu Chong was an official in Canglong County, it can be said that his experience as an official was not written at all. From the beginning to the end, he was only entangled with the villain, which made the protagonist image of "Fake Dog Official Real Blue Sky" lack a big part of the powerful force. support.

3. Failed emotional line
As the only emotional line in this book, the relationship between Xu Chong and Hua Nongyue can be said to be completely unprepared and unprepared from their acquaintance to their union. It is the most criticized and the biggest poisonous point.

However, this is also the author's first attempt at writing an emotional drama, and his lack of ability is irrefutable.

Of course, if the emotional drama is well written, it will be a big bonus for a book. The author cannot give up hastily. He can only learn more and supplement himself, and at the same time ensure that the next book will not be successful if he is not sure. Let the female character be the heroine.

4. World view issues
Don’t be afraid of your jokes. In fact, when the book was published, the outline only went as far as the step of dominating the Tianxuan Realm. The subsequent plot of the Great Ruins was written on the original outline after the author discovered that Tianxuan Realm was almost finished and only a few words were left. continuation.

There is essentially no problem with the setting of Daxu. What is really problematic is that the setting of reality + nothingness is too weak to express.

It not only fails to allow readers to form a clear image in their minds, but also because all kinds of new vocabulary appear all at once, making the plot extremely confusing and boring.

If I think about it now, it would really be more appropriate to simply use fairy + demon to show it.

Fortunately, the detour was filled in the end, even if it wasn't exciting... #武笑
5. Writing issues

When I was studying, the author always felt that although his writing was not good, it was good enough. But when he actually wrote the book, he discovered that there was a big problem in it.

Some readers may have discovered that in the early and middle stages of this book, I have always been obsessed with logic, wishing that all the reasons for everything and everyone could be explained clearly.

Although it is mixed with suspense elements, it really affects the reading experience.

As for online writing, the most important thing should be to make it easy and enjoyable for readers to read.

As for this book, it’s the kind of book that’s a little bit cool but not fun enough, and it’s hard to read T_T
The above are some of the larger issues that the author has reflected on.

If Yanzu, who has a sharp eye, finds any other shortcomings, please comment in this paragraph. The author will think about it deeply and dare not neglect it.

Of course, if you have emotions that need to be vented, please do so in this paragraph.

At last……

I wish you all a happy Mid-Autumn Festival and a happy National Day in advance!
Thanks! ! !

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