Cang's Ramblings

Chapter 220 219. Comments on "The Pillars of Ita"

Today I would like to recommend to you a gaming article with an “epic” writing style.

"Pillar of Ita", author: Fei Yan, level 5 author.

Category: Games-Virtual Games.

【Introduction】

Welcome to Ataria, the kingdom above the clouds.

Let's open the door, pick up our walking sticks, and start our adventure from here——

Through the hills of cloud and sea, like floating grass, the shallow river sparkles;

The fields flow with gold and honey, full of laughter, and under the low house of Rodale, melodious songs are heard.

Through the ancient forest of Egonn, where branches grow thick and whisper in the darkness;
Across the steep ridges and towering mountains, dark shadows lurked in the underground world, dangers lurked everywhere, and the sword shone.

A story about a boy chasing his dream. Above the sky and clouds, the shadow of a giant dragon soars with wings spread.

And after the dust of time has passed, the fire is still bright.

【Golden Ten Chapters】

Chapter One: A story of a girl, a boy, and a wolf. Fang Heng is an alchemist, skilled in repairing equipment, yet his non-magical body is practical. He relies on clockwork fairies and constant learning, a classic example of a diligent player. Meanwhile, Miya is a violent young woman. They are unaware of the danger they are in.

Chapter 2: The mercenary motto: Get paid for the job. The protagonist is a member of a mercenary group, carrying out a very important mission. Miya has gone to another combat group, and the protagonist and others are waiting for the employer to pay before they start the job.

Chapter 3: Shameful Grenadiers and Line Infantry. The protagonist's team encounters the main force of the Silver Forest Spears. The battle is so intense that even the protagonist, Konoha, a casualty, is forced to wield a Seven-Type Flintlock Rifle. He uses a Clockwork Fairy to disrupt the vision of a raider leader, allowing his teammates to successfully kill him.

Chapter 4: Insignificant Pawns. They once again encountered the attack of the Silver Forest Spear. Although they were victorious, it also led to speculation: were they just pawns in someone else's hands?

In Chapter 5, Etaria is not completely safe. A powerful figure from the shadows begins shooting at the protagonist and his group, causing panic among them. The protagonist remains calm, and the captain and his experienced team teach the protagonist how to shoot and fight.

Chapter 6: An Uninvited Visitor Behind the Drifting Mist. Outside the ruins, the group is attacked by druids. The protagonist is restrained by a woman, whom he desperately bites. But a greater danger emerges from behind the mist: a gigantic millipede, the guardian of the ruins and a dragon rider crafted only by alchemists. It seems headed for the protagonist.

Chapter 7: The Door, the Beginning of a Legend. This massive construct insect stares at the protagonist's backpack, where the dagger Mia gave him is. Blood covers the dagger, and the protagonist activates the Dragon Rider system. The test fails, but a strange emblem appears on his forehead. This may be the beginning of the protagonist's legendary life as a Dragon Rider.

Chapter 8, The Invisible Hand. The protagonist flees, carrying the mercenary deputy leader on his back, until his body gradually grows cold. Two factions confront each other at the ruins, one bowing their heads while the other requests a truce. Someone has entered the central area of ​​the ruins.

Chapter 9: Dragon Riders, Attack. All the mercenaries are dead, leaving the protagonist alone, hunted by other organizations. He barely maintains his will to fight until a giant construct worm bursts out from beneath the ground.

Chapter 10: Don't try to guess a woman's thoughts. Two giant construct insects remained within the ruins, drawn to them by the light from Miya's dagger. Seeing this, the pursuing enemy dared not go any further. After all, one's life couldn't be sacrificed so easily.

【Brief Comment】

Fei Yan is the author of "Sword of Amber", "Heart of Canaan" and "Pillars of Ita".

Her most famous work is "The Sword of Amber", and her work "The Pillars of Ita" was praised by readers as a great improvement in her writing style.

What's more, some people say that the writing style of this book has reached "epic level".

Anyone who has played the game knows that epic equipment is very difficult to obtain.

Taking DNF as an example, if you want to get a level 90 epic greatsword, how many times do you have to clear the abyss?

However, based on my trial reading, the writing style of this book is far from that level.

Although the world of the book is a Western fantasy game, there are many textual descriptions about foreign lands.

What is sacred, solemn, glorious...

For readers who rarely pay attention to such works, it does not add much sense of immersion.

On the contrary, Mao Ni's writing style is more in line with the oriental aesthetic. Jiao Jie also particularly likes to write about the environment and psychology, and she always writes a paragraph at the beginning and end of each chapter.

Readers who need to practice writing are advised to read the books of these three authors slowly.

Let’s talk about the characters and plot.

There are actually not many requirements for writing style for online articles.

Readers still look at the characters and the story.

The key is whether the characters are vivid enough and the storyline is exciting.

The character of the protagonist Fang Heng in this book has been criticized a lot. Even after all his teammates were killed, he was still thinking about a girl.

As for the plot, it is a bit slow and even dragged out.

As you can see, the number of words in each chapter of this book is quite sincere, 4000+.

But reading it is like reading a lyrical essay combined with a scientific paper.

The dangerous scenes, the passion of battle, and the subtle twists are still a little lacking.

In particular, the management of the book review area is a bit lax, and too many unpleasant reviews will also affect the development of a book.

However, what I said is more or less nitpicking.

Among many online writers, this sister's literary skills and the quality of her works are really excellent.

【to sum up】

Writing is not easy, so cherish every moment!

I’m Cang Yiwei, and I’m here to promote “Cang’s Ramblings”!
Welcome to the paradise of book reviews.

【Cang's Ramblings】

First of all, I would like to thank 2014 Little Book Friend for the reward of 1000 Qidian coins, Biluo Qinghua for the reward of 500 Qidian coins, and Mr. Yuwen for the reward of 100 Qidian coins.

Secondly, the updates to this book are fierce.

Each chapter was over 5000 words long, which resulted in me feeling like I was reading two books when I was writing the golden ten chapters.

Coupled with the authentic fantasy style, many settings are confusing.

The description of scenery and the psychology of characters are so detailed that I want to skip through it, but I can't bear to miss the author's writing style.

I really envy these authors with good writing skills. What they write is elegant and beautiful, just like the ballet class that Peppa Pig takes.

The story is also full of twists and turns of fate. In the next copy, the whole team was wiped out. Several forces confronted and fought against each other, but in the end, the best things were given to others.

The witch Mia's ability to strategize is no less than that of the all-seeing KUN.

Although the protagonist is an ordinary person who traveled through time, he soared into the sky after activating his bloodline, and the road to becoming a dragon knight is not far away.

Although this book has many good points, it is too niche.

It's even more niche than writing about the SCP Foundation.

The author has written three books in one go, which I really admire.

If you are also interested in this slightly complicated book, you might as well take a look at it to learn some new things and gain some insights!

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