College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 106 Fragment of "Human Words" (1)
(Hubei volume in 2005)

composition test questions
Read the text below, according to what the article says.

The poet must enter the universe and life, and must go out of it.If you enter it, you can write it.It is beyond it, so it can be observed.It enters into it, so it is angry.It is beyond the outside, so there is a high degree.

The above is a text in Wang Guowei's "Renjian Cihua", which discusses the poet's attitude and method of observing and expressing the universe and life.In fact, the ideas contained in this text are inspiring for us to write, deal with things, be a human being, appreciate nature, and understand society.

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Please write an article of no less than 800 words based on your understanding of this text, make up your own ideas, choose your own style, and draw up your own title.

Question Analysis
This is a material composition, which can also be understood as an "invisible" relational topic composition.It has a profound cultural background and is quite dialectical.The main meaning of Wang Guowei's passage is: People who are engaged in literary writing must go deep into life, and only when they go deep into life can they write moving works with true feelings;The material mainly discusses the poet's attitude and method of observing and expressing the universe and life.In fact, the ideas contained in this text are inspiring for us to write, deal with things, be a human being, appreciate nature, and understand society.Generally speaking, candidates must use the material as the trigger point of thinking, and write down their feelings and understandings from this point to that point: the first step is to be able to find its concrete form in life, and connect the "inner" and "outer" relationships with real life connect people, things, and things in the world, and talk about the relationship between the individual and the collective, reality and ideals, and the local and the overall; the second step is to re-abstract the specific things, and in the process of abstraction, it is necessary to recognize the things And evaluation, sublimation of the gist of the full text.

Writing Ideas Tips
The basic idea of ​​materials is the dialectical relationship between "inside" and "outside".Comprehension and conception are from multiple perspectives, which can be written in terms of writing, dealing with the world, being a human being, seeing things, appreciating nature, understanding society, interpreting history, comprehending life, etc.; Besides", you can also focus on one aspect to write, but you must take into account the other aspect while emphasizing on one aspect, because the topic is dialectical.As long as we carefully understand Wang Guowei's exposition, carefully analyze the introduction of the title, always grasp the essence of Wang Guowei's exposition quoted by the proponent, grasp the meaning of the master's exposition, and understand that he wants us to understand "observing and expressing the universe" through reading poems. Attitudes and methods of life”, so as to apply these attitudes and methods to “writing, doing things, being a person, appreciating nature, and understanding society” to improve our ideological quality and improve our quality of life.Then, it is not difficult for candidates to find out the specific writing direction of the questioner, so as to accurately grasp the key points and difficulties of writing, find a breakthrough, choose a writing form, find an entry point, quickly cut into the topic, and conceive the essay.

Full score sample essay
Chrysanthemum life
(a candidate from Hubei)

Clusters of fragrant chrysanthemums are quietly placed in the yard, beautiful butterflies are dancing among the flowers, and clear mountain streams flow through the gate of the courtyard.In the morning, the fog gradually dissipated.Through the meager sunlight, an old man walked towards the courtyard with a hoe and a bamboo basket. "Mountain weather is beautiful at day and night, and the birds return each other..." He sang a poem, and stepped into the yard leisurely... He was Tao Yuanming.

Youyou Xiangju is his companion, working in the fields for self-sufficiency.In my spare time, I brewed chrysanthemum tea with clear springs and savored it carefully; when I was busy with farming, I slept with the chrysanthemums and enjoyed it.Tao Yuanming really lives a comfortable life, his body is full of unique leisure and open-mindedness!

However, he really lived like what the world said: in the land of Taoyuan, isolated from the world, with a hidden cave?However, how many people can fully understand his feelings of resolutely leaving the officialdom that everyone thinks is a happy life?Can you feel his pain and helplessness in the secular disputes, hypocrisy and dirty officialdom?He understands that relying on one person's ability is fundamentally powerless to reverse the trend of history.In this case, there is no need for him to be nostalgic, he can only choose to be born angrily, and only he himself understands that he left helplessly, sadly, lonely, and even a bit desolate.He hated that his ambition was buried by this muddy world, and he lamented that his talent could not be fully displayed in this officialdom.He only has internal contradictions and pain in his heart, which leads to the external "chrysanthemum" complex and "chrysanthemum" life.

Therefore, Tao Yuanming hopes that when he "enters", he will be leisurely, at ease, forget everything, transcend vulgarity, and return to nature;Perhaps it is precisely because of his depression and extreme struggle that he has given the world a shocking detachment in his struggle to overcome the secular world and self, a kind of quiet beauty that is extraordinary and returns to nature beyond oneself.

"A poet must enter into the universe and life, and must go beyond it." Tao Yuanming's "outside" is the external open-mindedness and chic; Elegant.We often only see Tao Yuanming's simple contented and interesting "outside", but we don't know his thought struggle, depressed and complicated "inside".Some people may say that he is aloof, some may say that he is super stupid, these are relatively unimportant to him.In Tao Yuanming's eyes, the most important thing is the chrysanthemum, which is his true love for life and nature, and his full interpretation of the difference beyond ordinary life. "Picking chrysanthemums under the eastern fence, and seeing Nanshan leisurely", let us clearly see an extraordinary and refined Tao Yuanming, holding a cup of chrysanthemum tea, savoring his chrysanthemums leisurely, "out" and "in" the world!
score review
The articles have lofty ideas, unique insights, and exquisite language, which demonstrate the candidates' profound Chinese skills.The article is full of dialectical color, integrating philosophical thinking with deep affection.With the help of the classic case of Tao Qian's retreat, Tao Yuanming successfully created the image of Tao Yuanming resolutely leaving the officialdom, "going out" freely, "entering" calmly, and returning to the mountains and forests.

Celebrity Quotes
Picking chrysanthemums under the eastern fence, leisurely seeing Nanshan.The weather in the mountains is beautiful at day and night, and the birds return each other. —— Tao Yuanming
Hidden in the city

(a candidate from Hubei)

The ancients have a saying: small hermits hide in the mountains; big hermits hide in the city.

In our impression, it's just that immortals and Taoists must live near the mountains and don't hear about world affairs.Cai Zhizhong once explained this with cartoons: Immortals, "people" beside the "mountain" are immortals; "people" in the "mountain" are really immortals.It seems that the creation of characters in ancient times clarified the true meaning.

Living next to the mountain, blending with the mountains and rivers, this is a symbol of not eating the smoke and fire of the world, but he has practiced Taoism, permeated with endless Zen, and just entered the soil with Taoism and retreated to the mountains.For thousands of years, literati and inkmen have all been moved by this.Among them, Tao Yuanming is such a typical example. When his "Peach Blossom Spring" was published, the heart that was tired of official career and yearned for the imaginary Peach Blossom Spring was also born.Yes, what he wants is seclusion, leisure, and a peaceful life, but if it is not for the frustration in the officialdom and the underappreciation of talents, a refuge like Taohuayuan will be isolated from him forever, and it will be far away from the world and disappear in his future simple life.

You know, not all people can't resist the depression of will. There are "born in the world", and there are also "entered into the world", so many "heroes" have surfaced and hidden in the city. "There will be times when the wind and the waves cleave, hang the clouds and sail straight to help the sea", Li Bai, who is in high spirits, is full of infinite longing for the future.He wants to show his talents through his official career, serve the country and spend his life.However, years of official life and years of traveling with swords made Li Bai reflect.There have been triumphs and frustrations, and he finally saw the hardships and darkness of his career as an official. Gao Lishi actually handcuffed his feet for putting on boots for him, and the reward from the court was actually begging for alms from his master.So "bells, drums, and jade are not expensive, I hope I won't wake up after being drunk." He washes away the depression in his heart with fine wine, and washes away the filth in the world with mountain springs. Every time he wakes up after being drunk, he starts to look at the world and nature again, trekking north and south.He always has a kind of belief, always has a kind of fiery poetic impulse, and always has the free and easy "in and out" of the super-vulgar!Therefore, although he was not reused by the court, he was neither abandoned by the world nor forgotten by the people.So he kept regaining hope, and kept "hiding himself in the city". Perhaps his philosophy of life is "life in the universe, both inside and out of it"!Li Bai!He deserves to be called a "poetry fairy", but he is a fairy who lives in the city.

"I don't know the true face of Lushan Mountain, but I only live in this mountain."We don't have to "go out" like Tao Qian, and we don't have to "go in" like Li Bai, but we want everything to be in one mind.As the saying goes, "the heart is pure and naturally cool", as long as the heart is sincere and pure, why should we bother with the filthy mundane things?We might as well calm down: the big hermit is hidden in the city.

score review
The title of this article is fresh and relevant, the insights are unique and profound, the language is unrestrained and fluent, wit is revealed in humor, seriousness is revealed in laughter and humor, and profoundness is revealed in vivid images.It powerfully expresses the so-called "big hermit in the market", that is, rebirth after entering the WTO. "Exit" is not an escape, but a higher-level manifestation of "entry".

Celebrity Quotes
There will be times when the wind and the waves cleave, hang the clouds and sail straight to the sea. —— Li Bai

Bells, drums, and jade are not expensive, but I hope I won’t wake up after being drunk. —— Li Bai

I don't know the true face of Lushan Mountain, just because I am in this mountain. --Su Shi

classic case
Tao Yuanming, Li Bai

Up close and far away

(a candidate from Hubei)

Lushan Mountain needs to be seen closely, and its clear streams, strange rocks and colorful cave rocks are in various forms; Lushan Mountain needs to be viewed from a distance, surrounded by smoke and clouds, and mist.The wheat field needs to be seen closely, and the blossoming ears of wheat are full and ready to fall; the wheat field needs to be looked at from afar, and the rolling wheat waves are sprinkled golden on the blue sky.Life needs a close view, the brilliance of the sun, the singing of birds, the smiles of passers-by, the little details make life so happy and beautiful; bruises—so small they were.

When you wow come into this world, the kiss of God let you start your journey in life with His generous mercy.Since then, you have entered a close-up life. The care of your parents, the love of your relatives, and the support of your friends all make you feel the happiness and fulfillment of life.Just like looking at the springs and rocks of Lushan Mountain up close, you will feel refreshed; the full ears of rice in the fields will make you feel the joy of a good harvest;These joys make the boat of life full of sails, make life full of hope, and make people have infinite yearning for the future.

However, no one will be God's favorite forever. Sometimes the halo on your head fades, and setbacks and sufferings come one after another.Frustration in career, disappointment in studies, departure of relatives, betrayal of friends, every situation will make you miserable and make your life suddenly dark.When you feel that your life has been defeated, when you feel that your life is unfortunately being involved in the vortex of suffering, when you feel that the future is meaningless, friends, please jump out, jump out!Stand outside the circle of life, stand on the edge of a high enough state of mind, and look at the long river of life. In her winding body, all the trials and tribulations you encounter now are just rolling sandstones in the riverbed. It's just a detail that can be ignored on your long life journey.Those terrible darkness and those turbulent eddies are just "disasters" imagined by you in frustration.You must understand that from the perspective of your entire life, the so-called "disasters" are too small to be worth mentioning.Hawking was at the peak of his career, but he was injured repeatedly, and the heavy blow was enough to break his spirit. However, he jumped out of the circle of "disaster", saw the surmountability of illness and the ups and downs of life, and finally overcome I got sick and flew over the rough.His great perseverance is admired by the world, and his great achievements are cherished by the world.King Goujian of Yue endured the pain of subjugation and endured decades of inhuman humiliation. He insisted on the belief of restoring the country because he saw the light of life from outside the circle, and he saw the hope of victory and revenge. In the end, he created Incredible historical miracle.Let me ask, if he didn't have the instinct to escape from the "inner demon" in his body and look at life from a distance, where would he have the strength to support his comeback?Yes, looking from a distance gives people a clear mind and makes people understand the beauty of life better; looking from afar gives people courage, and makes people not afraid of hardships and dangers because they see hope; looking from afar gives people confidence, makes people regroup, stay away from the past, and face future.

A closer look at life is delicate, full of warm touch, and a little bit of sweetness seeps into my heart; looking at the magnificence of life from a distance, with the heroism of letting go of the past, gain confidence to welcome more beauty.Such a close view and a distant view, harmonious and unified, it makes us happy forever, pain disappears, and the beauty of life is panoramic!
score review
The article fits the topic and has a clear point of view.The illustrations are rich, the examples are typical, and the arguments are powerful; the metaphors are vivid, easy to understand, vivid and touching.The use of a large number of rhetorical techniques such as metaphors, parallelism, duality, and appeals makes the article brilliant and very friendly.The structure of the article also echoes back and forth, the beginning and the end are harmonious, and the structure is rigorous.

In and out of life
(a candidate from Hubei)

Wang Guowei said in "Human Words": "A poet must enter the universe and life, and must go beyond it. Entering into it, so he can write it. Going out of it, so he can observe it. Entering It is vital because it is inside, and it is lofty because it is outside.” Its intention is to tell people that the outlook on life should not only be deeply explored, but also be able to jump out of the limitations of thinking at any time.But how many people can do so freely?
(End of this chapter)