College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 72 I want to hold your hand (1)
(2006 Shanghai Volume)

composition test questions
Write an essay on the topic "I want to hold your hand".

Requirements: (1) No less than 800 words. (2) Don't write it as poetry. (3) Do not disclose personal information in the article.

Question Analysis
Shanghai's topic has always been well received, and this year's topic is even more poetic.This year's Shanghai college entrance examination composition questions continue to continue the idea of ​​Shanghai college entrance examination composition propositions in recent years, which are plain and friendly, and close to life.The essay questions adopt the form of propositional composition, the structure is simple and clear, and the openness is very large, which is conducive to the expression of the examinee's true feelings.Judging from the title, this is a complete sentence title with a complete subject, predicate, and object. It clearly states one thing, that is, why "I" (candidate) "want" to "hold your hand".The focus of article writing is on the word "think", why "think"?How do you "think"?This is the point of the article idea.When conceiving, think clearly about these key questions: who is "you", write one "you", or write several "you"?Why hold your hand, i.e. what is behind the handshake?The writing angles and contents are very rich, the angles to choose are also colorful, and the space for association and exploration is quite broad.

Writing Ideas Tips
From the perspective of reviewing questions, the direction of the article is also varied. From the perspective of choosing "you": this "you" can be people around you, such as relatives, classmates, neighbors, passers-by, teachers, etc.; "You" can also be written about contemporary famous people, such as successful people or disadvantaged groups, supergirls, idols, stars, etc.; this "you" can also be a person who spans time and space, such as Tagore, Einstein, Du Fu , Su Shi, etc.; this "you" can also be a character in a literary work, such as the protagonist in a certain literary masterpiece, a character in a myth, legend, or fable, etc.; this "you" can also be some abstract idea or concept , Such as writing "saving", "integrity", "eight honors and eight disgraces".Of course, this "you" can be a specific person or a certain type of person.But generally speaking, choosing a specific "person" is easy to write well. It is specific, vivid, and easy to conceive.Secondly, "hand" in the title is both concrete and abstract, and the emphasis is on the abstract sense. "Hand" here refers to the spiritual, immaterial things of the character ("you").Because "you" have this ("hand"), it wants to "hold your hand".Wanting to "hold your hand" is also because it resonates with "me".Thus, the theme of the article is revealed.

Full score sample essay
I want to hold your hand

(a candidate from Shanghai)

Beautiful melody, colorful notes, yes!That is music.I grew up in a music environment. While enjoying the meticulous care of my parents, I also enjoy the beauty and fantasy that music brings to me.I have always wanted to hold the hand of music, always, even a kind of eagerness and urgency to hold your hand, but there is always an unknown distance.

When other children were still listening to "Grandma's Bridge", Mendelssohn's "Riding on the Wings of Singing" was already lingering around me. When others began to learn to sing Jay Chou's "Nunchuck", my side was With Verdi's "Four Seasons"... Haven't I held your hand for this?Yes, not at all.Although you are so close to me, even at your fingertips, I feel that your content is so profound, and you have hundreds of years of civilization, waiting for me to follow!
Stepping into my childhood, I started my career as a violin boy. Every day I grew up under your arms. I thought that I had fully entered your world by holding your hand, but I was wrong. up!The longer I spend with you, the more I feel my ignorance.

After I have read a lot of music works, after I appreciate the rigor of Haydn's "Clock", the surge of Beethoven's "Fate", and the lightness and leisure of Mozart's "Minuet", I was shocked, and I felt An unprecedented enrichment, both physically and spiritually.

I have tasted your charm again and again. For more than ten years, I have listened to almost every CD no less than ten times. Every time I eagerly reach out and want to hold your hand, but every time there is always regret in joy .In fantasy, such a scene is like Zeus wanting to grab the hand of God, but separated by that gap, which is out of reach.Perhaps, music, you have such a charm that fills me with fantasies, makes me constantly seek, and makes me stride forward to pursue.

When I was 15 years old, I took a master class with Perlman.This master is not as I imagined: personable, vigorous steps, flexible stage performance, but suffered from polio since childhood, resulting in disabled legs and paralysis of the lower limbs.However, his performance was beyond my expectation. When he held up the bow in his hand and his nimble fingers danced, I found that the music had a different style and feeling under his interpretation.The music I am familiar with has more vitality and infinite tension.At this time, I understood that music needs to be interpreted by the heart, not just the accumulation of skills and notes, but the splendor of life and the chapters of life.

I love music, and I want to hold your hand. Maybe I can't hold it now, and I won't be able to hold it in the future, but your fantasy and splendor lie in your constant pursuit and appreciation. Follow your why.

To dream, to seek, to pursue.

Just to hold your hand.

score review
This is a masterpiece in the examination room that uses music to interpret the essay questions.The student affectionately narrates his experience and perception of shaking hands with the music intimately and embracing each other passionately.That obsessive passion for music is admirable!The unique and careful selection of materials, unique and profound ideas, and beautiful and fluent language are also the success of the article's high score.

I want to hold your hand

(a candidate from Shanghai)

What I miss most is the warmth of your palm in my palm.But the memory of one hand, small and weightless, can hold my whole world.

--Inscription

When we sit hand in hand and walk shoulder to shoulder, I can feel how real happiness it is.When I linger at the intersection of staying and not staying, I know that it takes courage to love or not to love, and we need more courage to walk hand in hand.

I never dare to expect too much true love from me, I just want to wait for a lonely heart, and I dare not appreciate the small and beautiful scenery around me, so I always let go of myself in a hurry footsteps.Yes, I was escaping, escaping from reality.However, even if I close my eyes and try my best to resist, it is still difficult to reduce the fantasy and obliterate the concern of love. You always make me unable to let go. Smoke rises faintly.I look forward to staying with you every day, but there are too many practical problems that we have to face, so we have to let the two lovesick hearts drift away with the wind.

Many people always say that they feel sad after reading my articles. In fact, sad words are not enough to represent a heart full of loneliness. I always fall into the depths of sad feelings unconsciously.The years pass by silently, with cute little faces like those of their peers, but in the depths of their hearts, they are much older, and what overlaps in their hearts is no longer the past, but another kind of heavier concern and lovesickness , more helpless and helpless.I used to think that I was a speck of dust floating in the wind, and complained about some injustices in life, but I had to endure some so-called big winds and waves, a heart full of trauma but looking forward to eternal love.

When the wind blows, count the fallen leaves quietly, the dream hidden deep in my heart can only be realized in the dream, falling in love with you does not require too many words, perhaps, the words also become pale and powerless, as long as Can feel with one heart.Borrow the power of the soul in your life, let yourself think about you unforgettable, let yourself miss you, no longer because of loneliness, but the deepest feeling in the world of the soul, maybe, people in love feel that Everything is so beautiful.I have felt the scene where the withered teng is still entangled with a big tree in the sky, and I have felt that the grass is still waiting at the foot of a flower. I don’t know if those people who walk in a hurry will feel those moving sides?
I remember that there is such a saying, "If the two loves last for a long time, how can they be in the morning and evening".Yes, although, that’s what I said, but I still want to see you every day, hold your hand, walk hand in hand with you, watch the tide rise and fall, sing the cold wind of the dawn moon, and feel together Watching every joy, anger, sorrow and joy of you and me.

Love is most afraid of hesitation, looking back can only be nostalgia, loneliness is always strong because of you, lovesickness can't survive the long midnight.I don't think of you when I'm lonely, but I feel lonely because of thinking of you.I am not afraid of suffering too much pain and injury, but I am afraid of losing this affectionate and entangled longing.

Many times, I helplessly resent the ruthlessness of life. I know that there are too many ups and downs in real life, and we all have to face them, and we must face them. I can't just lament and resent fate.Because, I know, there is another you who will go through wind and rain with me, walk together in the journey of life, and share the wind and rain together, right?
I love you, I just want to hold your hand and walk quietly...

score review
The inscription in the opening chapter is ingenious and subtle, which not only gives the entry position of the article, but also cleverly explains the origin of the lyrical narrative, which is really ingenious.The author's feelings are delicate and sincere, lingering and touching.The language is poignant and fluent, and it is evocative to read.

wonderful words
What I miss most is the warmth of your palm in my palm.But the memory of a hand, small and weightless.But hold my whole world.

Love is most afraid of hesitation, looking back can only be nostalgia, loneliness is always strong because of you, lovesickness can't survive the long midnight.

I don't think of you when I'm lonely, but I feel lonely because of thinking of you.

I am not afraid of suffering too much pain and injury, but I am afraid of losing this affectionate and entangled longing.

I want to hold your hand

(a candidate from Shanghai)

I want to hold your hand--

When you sit alone in that dank prison, waiting for the final decision.You, a small historian, don't have much property, facing such a prison, you can only make a humiliating choice... Who knows the pain and helplessness rolling in your heart at that moment, who can understand you The humiliation and tears in my heart?If time can be turned back, I want to hold your hand, and I want to tell you a word: In the hearts of millions of Chinese, you, Sima Qian, are a great hero!With your thin body, you have created the eternal soul in the hearts of the Chinese people. Humiliation not only did not destroy a person's personality, but made him extraordinary greatness!
I want to hold your hand--

When the moonlight on the Storm Pavilion loses its luster, when you look at your son beside you with tearful eyes, and at the mountains and rivers that are about to part, you, a general who lost his soldiers, faced a glass of poisoned wine, you chose to swallow !Does anyone know the emotion that surged in your heart at that moment, who knows the grief of your unfulfilling death at an early age?If time could be turned back, I want to hold your hand, and I want to say to you: You, General Yue Fei, although you died in a political struggle, you have already become the soul of the nation!In order to regain the lost ground, you wrote down the oath of "feat the barbarians hungry with ambition, and drink the blood of the Huns with a smile". Who can forget the words "serve the country with loyalty" engraved on your back!Your death has made the most vivid comment on the word loyalty and traitor, and built a clear wall between loyalty and traitor.

I want to hold your hand--

You crying child in the street, the bombs of the invaders killed your parents, the roar of the bombs all around and the fear seized your heart, so you cry, but child, when I see your picture, my heart Also bleeding!If time can go back, I want to hold your hand, I want to tell you: child, don't cry!Let's grow up together and drive the invaders out of Greater China!
You, child infected with AIDS, I want to hold your hand!Let me tell you the meaning of existence and let you feel the warmth of the world.

You, seriously ill teenager, I want to hold your hand, I want to tell you that the world is still full of love, still full of warmth.

You, the out-of-school children with wide-open eyes, I want to hold your hand, I want to sing for you softly, carry your schoolbag for you, and send you into Hope School.

If time could go back, I really want to hold your hands!

I searched from the long river of history and found my personality, my soul, my brother, my ideal and pursuit.

If I could, I would become a doctor, a nurse, and a rural teacher, because deep down in my heart, there is an unyielding patriotic soul!

score review
This is a masterpiece written in prose poetry.The author wittily focuses the lens on the starry sky of history and reality, carefully selects materials, and cleverly uses examples such as Sima Qian, Yue Fei, children crying in the street, children infected with AIDS, seriously ill teenagers, and children who have dropped out of school to solve problems skillfully. Great work.In addition, the appropriate use of detailed writing and short writing is another major feature of this article.

I want to hold your hand

- tears in eyes

(a candidate from Shanghai)

Hold your hand, cherish it in this life.

--Inscription

I don't admit that I am a sentimental person like Lin Daiyu, nor do I think I am a graceful poet who mourns autumn and spring, and I don't believe that I will cry when I look at "Love is deep, rain is falling".

But I am by no means an emotionally pale person.However, it has been a long time since I felt tears.Maybe it's because I buried my tears very deeply, or maybe it's because the reality is too cruel, so I suppressed the tears so that they wouldn't flow out.Long time no see, the feeling of tears!

A few days ago, a friend wrote to say that he had passed the relevant examinations and was going to Singapore, and he would go home in December.Holding this thin letter paper, it seems to be very important.He is the most intimate friend I have met in the three years of high school.After graduating from high school, he successfully entered a key university, and will go abroad in a few days, but I was forced into a corner of the repeat class by the god of fate, and I couldn't help but feel a little sad and sad.

It was a dusk that was about to fall.In late autumn, the temperature is also very low.My friend came to the school to look for me with a lot of dust! "Brother!" I recognized him at a glance and shouted excitedly.Still as before, my friend didn't have too many words, but simply introduced the situation in Singapore.After all, it is difficult for him to say clearly about the future.He said that he was going to leave in a few days, and that he might not be able to return for two or three years. It takes a bloody fight, and we can't talk face to face forever.But the news came so suddenly that I barely reacted.After today, I will be separated from my true friends, and I feel a little lost and empty.

(End of this chapter)