College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 74
(2006 Hunan roll)

composition test questions
Read the text below, according to what the article says.

"Modern Chinese Dictionary" lists three meanings of the term "mood and spirit": ① will and spirit, such as high spirits;

[Notice]

Please contact your own feelings and understanding, and write an argumentative essay of no less than 800 words on the topic of "Talking about Mood".

Question Analysis
From the point of view of the form of the proposition, the composition topics of the Hunan Provincial College Entrance Examination in 2006 are characterized by propositional compositions with prompts and argumentative essays with limited genres.In Hunan Province in recent years, the proposition track of college entrance examination composition is as follows: from "Family Education" in 2004, topic composition, genre is not limited; to "running experience" in 2005, topic composition, genre is limited to narrative or argumentative essay; By 2006, "Talking about Mood", the title composition was limited to argumentative essays.We can see that the composition proposition has gone through a process of opening from wide open to limited.Talking about a concept of "motivation" may make candidates feel that it is irrelevant. In the question, three explanations are provided for the concept and an idiom context, which plays a role in reminding candidates and expanding their thinking. Candidates do not have to worry about the concept in the examination room. It is too clear to write, and it is not possible to write a stereotyped idea.Therefore, there are restrictions, but it is still reasonable; there is openness, but it does not mean that it is vast and boundless.Judging from the content of the proposition, "spirit" has a lot to do with Hunan culture.Mood is a double-edged sword. It has created the "brave" character of Hunan people, and it has also created the "bloody" and "dare to be the first" character traits in Hunan culture.However, what kind of "spirit" does modern society need?

Writing Ideas Tips
Although the proposition cites the interpretation of the "Modern Chinese Dictionary" to explain the three meanings of the word "spirituality", in fact the three meanings of the word "spirituality" point to a person's "spiritual outlook" and "making friends" respectively. And "doing things" these three aspects.Don't confuse this "spirit" with the "loyalty" of "brother loyalty", otherwise it will be too late to regret if you miss the title.Obviously, the composition proposition in 2006 puts forward very high requirements on the examinee's ability to review questions.

Full score sample essay
Talk about spirits

(a candidate from Hunan Province)

"Thousands of blows are still strong, let the east, west, north and south wind", it is the green bamboo that shows its spirit to you, and shows a kind of unyielding and tenacity that runs through life; "Flow in the play", it is the tide-gatherer at the top of the wave showing his spirit to you, showing a kind of bravery and fearlessness that flourishes in the blood; The walker is showing you his spirit, showing a firm confidence that supports life and hope.

Spirit, the support of life, the cornerstone of success.

People full of spirit are tenacious and unyielding, they are not afraid of wind and frost, cold rain.Remember "Black Antelope" Wilma Doffer?Who can imagine that a little girl who once suffered from polio and struggled to walk is now enjoying the glory of the king standing on the glorious Olympic podium?However, she did it, and she paved her way to success with repeated falls and efforts.There may be too many obstacles and thorns on this road to imagine.However, she who was full of vigor, had she ever retreated in the slightest?Spirituality has made her, and she also declares to the world that a tenacious life is so great.

People who are full of spirit are brave and fearless, they are not afraid of sacrifice, they go forward bravely, and they play heroism and brilliance in their lives.Everyone can never forget that era when the wind and rain were dark, when the iron hooves of the Japanese invaders were raging on the land of China, there was sadness and suffering everywhere, but in a small and inconspicuous village called Yunzaobin, eight hundred The anti-Japanese warriors rushed into the enemy camp, strapped with explosives and poured kerosene all over their bodies.With loud bangs, the blood of the soldiers stained the land that raised them red.No one survived that battle, but they walked so heroically that history will never forget them, so this battle is called "a miracle in the history of Chinese and foreign wars" by the world.We will not forget them, so tears still come to our eyes when we remember them.This group of respectable heroes full of spirit bravely sang the magnificent chapter of life.

People who are full of spirit are confident and optimistic. There are many winds and rains in life, and there are many hazes. Others only see dark clouds covering the sun, but they can always see the bright sunshine through the clouds and mists.I can't help but think of Lincoln, who lost eight times in eight elections, failed twice in business twice, and had a nervous breakdown in between.It seems that in these decades, he has been failing.However, a person full of spirit will never give up the belief in his heart in the face of the joke of fate, so for the last time, he succeeded.A divided country came together in his hands, and America's economy took off again.Only by firm belief and solid accumulation can one be able to embrace the moon in nine days and search for pearls in the deep sea.Lincoln's spirit gave him a firm and optimistic heart, so his name was recorded in the annals of history and passed down through the ages.

Spirituality, the tenacity and unyieldingness of life;
Spirituality, composing the magnificence and magnificence of life;
Spirituality builds self-confidence and optimism in the soul.

Sing the song of spirit in life, and sing the magnificent chapter of life; raise the sail of spirit in life, hit the water in the midstream, and see the scenery of the times; sharpen the sword of spirit in life, overcome thorns and thorns, Not afraid of the long road ahead, I create brilliance by myself.

score review
The structure of the article is rigorous and the thinking is clear.At the beginning, use three natural paragraphs to elicit your own unique feelings about "spirit" from famous poems, and then cite Wilma Rudolph, anti-Japanese warriors, Lincoln and other examples from three aspects to demonstrate, making the argument sufficient, the center prominent, and persuasive. stronger.In addition, the use of parallel sentence patterns is also a major feature of the article.

classic case
Wilma Dove, Eight Hundred Anti-Japanese Warriors, Lincoln

Talk about spirits

(a candidate from Hunan Province)

If it is said that a young eagle has to experience the baptism of wind and rain to soar into the sky, then the spirit of fighting the sky is its sharp eyes; Help him climb the iron hoof of thousands of mountains and rivers; if a person wants to stand proudly in the world, become a hero of a generation, and establish a great cause for a lifetime, then the spirit of giving up to me and fighting bravely is the cornerstone of his success.

The spirit of who else I am, makes people rise up.

I am used to seeing the mediocrity of ordinary people, and I am tired of hearing mediocre people complaining about themselves. The sentence "Why don't men wear Wu hooks and collect the fifty states of Guanshan" rekindles the passion for making contributions in our hearts; In spite of the futility of life experience, the shout of "the princes and generals are better than each other" reborn us with the heroic spirit to change our destiny.Who else but me makes us re-examine ourselves, rediscover the shining points in ourselves, and re-establish a brand-new self-image.The spirit of being who I am, makes us fully realize our own value and ability, and makes us fight bravely for the heavy responsibilities we shoulder. ——The spirit of who else than me is the starting point for people to take off.

The spirit of dedicating oneself to one's ideals makes one brave.

Anyone who wants to achieve great things needs to be honed and honed.Maybe God just likes to tease people who are committed to success, and he always wants to set up obstacles for people who are diligent in brilliance.That obstacle may be the raging fire in front of the Roman Inquisition, the continuous wind and thunder during Columbus's voyage to the New World, or the snow-capped mountains and grasslands during the Red Army's Long March... However, lucky people, they still have ideals, and they are dedicated to their ideals. Under the guidance of Bruno, they threw themselves into the sea of ​​fire like Bruno, and lived forever with the fire for defending the truth; under the guidance of the spirit of dedicating their ideals, they embarked on the journey without hesitation like Columbus, and worked hard to explore the unknown world; Under the guidance, they were as heroic as soldiers of the Red Army, conquering thousands of mountains and rivers, and fighting to save the nation. ——The spirit of devotion to ideals is the spiritual motivation for success.

The courage to explore is the golden key for people to realize their potential.

Science is full of unknown beauty.Curious human beings stand at the gate of the temple of nature and society, prying into the mysteries of it from time to time, but only those who are brave enough to explore bravely step into the forbidden zone set by God, wandering in the endless beauty of science.So we saw Yang Zhenning and Li Zhengdao bravely questioning their predecessors, Wu Jianxiong diligently experimented to solve the mystery, and a generation of masters Wang Ganchang contributed to the development of physics under extremely harsh scientific research conditions. ——The courage to explore is the root of success.

Looking at the long history of human beings for thousands of years, those who achieve great things are all high-spirited and impassioned people.Let us take the spirit of who else is our sail, the spirit of dedicating ourselves to our ideals as the pointer, and the spirit of courage to explore and challenge as oars, and let us drive the giant wheel of life and sail towards the other shore of success!
score review
The article is meticulous and rigorous, the discussion contains emotion, and the lyric exudes rationality, which is inspiring to read.The first few groups of parallel sentences revealed a solid foundation of poetry and books in the analysis, allowing the brilliance of culture to be perfectly reflected between the lines.The full text "shape", "reason", "emotion" and "things" organically blend, ancient and modern, Chinese and foreign, with rich materials and substantial content. The author's emotions are concentrated in a large number of sentences, making the writing full of momentum.

Celebrity Quotes
Why don't the men take the Wu hook and collect the fifty states of Guanshan. ——Li He "South Garden"

Talk about spirits

(a candidate from Hunan Province)

Spirituality is Li Bai’s sung song of “Laughing up to the sky and going out, we are not Penghao people”; Spirituality is Du Fu’s heartfelt words of “To Jun Yao and Shun, and then make customs simple”; "Today" has a strong feeling...

People must have their own will and spirit, and they must be high-spirited.A person cannot be without spirit, just like a sequoia that is proud of the sky cannot be without a solid foundation, and fragrant flowers cannot be without the sunshine that gives it confidence.

Only when people are motivated can they have an open mind. "An Neng smashes eyebrows and bends waist to serve the powerful, which makes me unhappy." Li Bai, who was slandered by others, was rewarded with gold by Xuanzong. Although he had the virtues of a star, his talents were as brilliant as the sun and the moon, his ideals eventually came to naught .But he is still full of spirits, "Raise a glass to invite the bright moon, and the shadows form three people". When the wine enters the heart, three parts become moonlight, seven parts whistle into sword energy, and a show of mouth is half of the Tang Dynasty.If he was not angry, how could he have such an open mind? "Only the cool breeze on the river, and the bright moon in the mountains, the sound of hearing it, and the color of seeing it with the eyes", Su Zi was full of spirit, even though he was splashed with sewage from the officialdom and literary circles, he was still full of spirit. "I don't own anything, even if I don't take anything...it's the endless treasure of the creator, and what I and my children share." The open-mindedness of the mind is evident.

Only when a person is motivated can he stand up when the country is in crisis, and he can be famous through the ages and will last forever.The ups and downs of nearly a thousand years have already washed away the little blood in Fengbo Pavilion; the ebb and flow of tides for nearly a thousand years have already drowned out the sighs in the Lonely Ocean; The long yellow sand of thousands of years has already drowned the sound of camel bells on the road to the Western Regions...However, Yue Wumu's enthusiasm, Wen Tianxiang's loyalty, Su Wu's Chinese festival, Zhang Qian's more than ten years of imprisonment, It has already been included in the annals of history and has become the spiritual treasure of the nation.How could they have acted so boldly if they had no spirit?
Only when people have spirit, can they be undestroyed, overwhelmed, pursued unfailingly, and will unfailing.Do you still remember the kind and caring "Thousand-handed Avalokitesvara" on the stage?Her lead dancer, Tai Lihua, is deaf-mute, but she is energetic, her arms are bruised and the soles of her feet are bleeding, and she persists in practicing.In the end, she outlined the beauty of human nature with her fingers, and interpreted her inner feelings with her dance moves, which touched China, you and me.How could she rise from the trough of misfortune to the pinnacle of art if she was not angry?
Spirituality is necessary for success in life.However, there are quite a few people who lack energy in real life. They are weak and numb in the gentle and rich countryside, their ambitions are calmed down in the singing and dancing, and they lose their humanity in the feasting and feasting... All these, we must resolutely oppose and fight against them. , To clear the way for building a socialist harmonious society.

People, you have to be energetic and vigorous.

score review
At the beginning of the chapter, the poems of three great men are cleverly used in sentences, which immediately makes the article full of momentum.It is actually a good opening essay in the examination room, showing the candidates' rich cultural accumulation and solid writing skills.In addition, it is rich in examples, spanning ancient and modern times is another feature.

Celebrity Quotes
Looking up to the sky and laughing, I went out, how can I be from Penghao? —— Li Bai

To Jun Yao and Shun, let the customs be pure. ——Du Fu

Count the romantic figures, but also look at the present. ——Mao Zedong
Talk about spirits

(a candidate from Hunan Province)

The word "spirit" has a meaning in "Modern Chinese Dictionary": will and spirit, such as vigorous spirit.

From this meaning, it is easy to think that Chairman Mao once wrote a famous sentence in "Qinyuanchun·Changsha" that "scholars are full of enthusiasm, and they scold Fang Qiu".In fact, it was this "book business spirit" that allowed him to win the revolution, establish the People's Republic of China, and make him a great leader that will last forever in history.This shows that this "mind energy" is like Taiji, giving birth to the four phenomena and all things.

(End of this chapter)