College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 78 People and Roads (1)
(2006 Jiangsu volume)

composition test questions
Some people say that there are no roads in the world, and when more people travel, they become roads; some people say that there are roads in the world, but there are no roads when more people travel; some people say...

Requirements: Please write an 800-word essay on the topic of "People and the Road". The genre is not limited except poetry.

Question Analysis
The composition topic of Jiangsu college entrance examination in 2006 is a relational proposition composition.Basically, every student has something to say about this topic, but it does not give students a fixed mindset and limit their thinking. Instead, it gives students a broad space for them to play.The topics are more life-oriented, so it is easy to connect with society and real life, and the materials provided also have a strong dialectical relationship.For example, the first sentence: "There is no road in the world, and when there are many people walking, it becomes a road", obviously changed from the famous saying in Lu Xun's "Hometown", "Hope is nothing that doesn't matter, it doesn't matter what doesn't matter, just like the road on the ground. Road: In fact, there is no road on the ground, and when there are many people walking, it becomes a road."And the second sentence "It is also said that there are roads in the world, but when there are too many people walking, there is no road." This sentence is intriguing. Why does "many people" lead to no roads?Candidates may wish to think about it from multiple angles.Look at the third sentence "someone said...", this ellipsis implies that candidates can have various other personalized thinking about the relationship between "people and roads"; The key words are all in line with the purpose of the topic.In fact, the meaning of "road" is rich, and candidates can choose materials in a relatively wide space, but they must learn to choose the right path according to the actual situation and their own characteristics, and should not follow the trend, but should have an innovative spirit.

Writing Ideas Tips
Everyone has something to say about this topic, but the key to a good article and a high score lies in the depth of the article and the quality of the language.Candidates can roughly consider the problem from the following three angles: First, follow the train of thought of the first two sentences.You can write "Some people say that there is no way in the world, and if there are too many people walking, there is still no way", "Some people say that there is a way in the world, and if there are few people walking, there will be no way"... [-]. From " Starting from the common ground between "people" and "roads", for example, the twists and turns of life are like the twists and turns of the road, the road of life and so on; [-]. Give "road" a symbolic and metaphorical color, for example, people should follow the right path and avoid detours ;Go your own way, let others talk about it; you can also write about how people should walk; people and road traffic, and so on.

Full score sample essay
man and road

——Beauty is trying its best

(a candidate from Jiangsu)

We may not be great, but we are solemn; we may not be eternal, but we are sincere; we may not be perfect, but we work hard.

—— Bi Shumin
People are always so strange: on the vast snowfield, those who leave a firm and straight road always regret missing the splendid scenery along the way, and travel in a hurry; It is so difficult, why the axiom of "the shortest line between two points" has not penetrated the hearts of the people?Strange people looked at the string of straight or curved, deep or shallow footprints behind them and thought in confusion.In fact, there is no need to regret, no need to complain, whether it is straight and brilliant, or meandering and bleak, try your best to leave your own unique road on the snow field, and you will have the beauty of life.

I still remember that Wang Anshi wrote a line of his own heartfelt feelings in his own life in "You Baochan Mountain": "However, the power is enough to achieve it. It is ridiculed by others, but regretted by oneself; I can't achieve it even if I try my best." Those who have done so can have no regrets, so who can ridicule them?" "To do my best" means to do my best, so I can have no regrets.But if you don't "do what you can," you will be ridiculed just like the 39th President of the United States, Jimmy Carter. In 1946, after graduating from the Naval Academy, the young Jimmy Carter met Admiral Lee Coffey at the time. The general asked him to say a few things he thought he was proud of.So, the smug Jimmy Carter talked triumphantly about his graduation from the Naval Academy: "Among the 820 graduates in the school, I ranked 58th." The general didn't, but instead asked: "Why are you not No.1? Have you tried your best?" Carter was astonished, and then blushed with shame.Later, Jimmy Carter kept this sentence firmly in mind. Every time he took a step and stamped a life footprint, he asked himself: "Have you tried your best?" Because of this, he no longer cares about the directness of the footprints. Whether it is curved, deep or shallow, as long as there is the strength of struggle in every footprint, as long as every journey of life is full of hard work, as long as you suddenly look back on your life, you can touch your own evenly beating pulse and say "I Trying hard," he was satisfied.

Sometimes I feel that life is always very tiring. Before taking a step, you have to choose a fork and set up your course. Every time you take a step, you have to adjust your pace and catch up with the front. When you are tired, you can't help but look back at your life The string of one's own footprints on the road, compared with others, may be trembling and shallow.My mind is stuffy, and my eyes are very confused. The sentence "how should the road be taken" makes my nerves ache, so think about it, even though I am in a stinking garbage dump, I can proudly say "work is beautiful, Do your best and you will have no regrets" Ye Xin and his wife, then think of Sun Changliang, who has gone through the shadow of failing the college entrance examination, and tried his best to run the fragrant Xinyuanzhu, then quietly read the phrase "the sky did not leave me Traces, but I fly over" is a good sentence.

Deduce life with sincerity, do your best to take every step of life well, then your path is the ultimate beauty.

score review
Candidates use Bi Shumin's words as the inscription at the beginning of the chapter, responding to the title, leading the whole text, and making condescending and profound arguments.The full text closely follows the theme of "beauty lies in hard work", with detailed and typical materials, which are very convincing.The author skillfully uses metaphors, personifications, comparisons, quotations and other rhetoric, and also uses image descriptions in the narration, which is full of flesh and blood, calm and composed, which shows his composition skills.

man and road

(a candidate from Jiangsu)

Mountain darkly, vista.

--Inscription

The wind is blowing, the water is cold, and the road ahead is boundless.Along the way, the 5000-year-old profound culture has undoubtedly connected the "road" with people's future and destiny.

There are no roads in the world, and when there are many people walking, it becomes a road.The road is chosen by yourself, and you should go on without hesitation and never regret it.Tenacious like Kong Ming, who left Qishan six times; sad and fierce like Qu Zi, who threw himself into the Miluo River; worried and angry like Jiaxuan, who dreamed of blowing horns and went back to camp; depressed like Lu You, who never forgets to tell Nai Weng at family sacrifices.

In this way, they are resolute, firm, and never give in, standing upright like a towering mountain; fighting the frost bravely like a proud chrysanthemum;However, the towering peaks are frozen by ice and snow; the stubborn Qiuju can only fight alone; goshawks are often the hunter's favorite;If this is the case, not only will you be depressed, but others will treat you differently.Sometimes, we cannot stubbornly go all the way north, after all, all roads lead to Rome.In this case, we might as well turn a corner and go again.

The road is chosen by oneself. When there is no way to go, a turn may be a bright future.

Su Shi visited Chibi with an open mind and did not count gains or losses; Tao Qian lived in seclusion in the mountains and forests, picking chrysanthemums leisurely;Their minds are as open as plains, they accommodate rivers and seas, and they smile like spring flowers among the bushes...

Frustration is not terrible, and you can still sing like Taibai's "I am born to be useful, and I will come back after all my money is gone"; don't be like Liu Sanbian who whispered "holding your hands and looking at your tears, but you are speechless." The second time, how can there be such a word of worry", don't lament "Feng Tang Yi Lao, Li Guang is hard to seal".Going forthrightly, "composing poems while facing the clear stream", and looking for a paradise, we will find that this is also another kind of life.

We are now in our prime, in full swing.A little unsatisfactory will disappear in a blink of an eye. May this joy and freedom be with you all your life.

Sighing, if Kong Ming can turn a corner, he will not have the loneliness of "died before leaving the teacher, and the hero will burst into tears", and the history of the three-point return to Jin may be rewritten; There will be the distress of "the tall buildings on the city meet the wilderness, and the sea and sky are full of worries and thoughts", and the history of Chinese culture may gain more.Through the eyes of tears, you can't see the dawn of the future. If you turn around again, you will find that the sun turns the teardrops into a rainbow in front of your eyes.

score review
The author pays more attention to the integration of examples, or parallelism, or contrast, or set off, quoting from many sources and enriching the content.In addition, the article also quotes a large number of poems and essays, which vividly illustrate the point of view of the article. At the same time, combined with the scattered sentence patterns, the flexible use of rhetoric such as attestation, duality, parallelism, and metaphor makes the language of the article flexible and has a long meaning.

man and road

(a candidate from Jiangsu)

In the dead of night, I figured out the meaning of "people and roads" under the lonely lamp. I couldn't figure it out. I simply opened the window and stood facing the wind. I felt a feeling of having wings under my armpits, so I borrowed the wind from the vast wind. Strength, floating up like the independence of the world, bathed in the clear light of that room, I want to imitate Liezi's wind control, thinking for thousands of years, traveling the past and the present——

The breeze is coming slowly, and the water waves are calm.I dance against the wind, hover above the boundless expanse of red cliff, and dance lightly among the vast expanse of the universe.

I heard a loud sigh—Cao Mengde was standing in the bright moonlight, lonely and desolate.

It used to be that the banners covered the sky, and the boats flew thousands of miles;

However, life is like this. In the long river of history, how many undefeated monuments are there?In the huge waves of life, how many of them can always ride the wind and waves without being destroyed by the masts?
So you hold a glass of turbid wine, and sing along the river, and the river that passed away in the east is rolling and flowing.Facing a life full of ups and downs and failures, you accept it readily and stick to the path you choose, so the breeze in the mountains and the bright moon in the pines have recorded your name, so the river passing away will sing for you forever hymn.

The smoke of the Red Cliff has not yet cleared, and the battle songs of the martyrs can be faintly heard in the distant sky.

Despotism and ignorance covered the gloomy sky in the late Qing Dynasty. When the strong ships and sharp guns of imperialism ruthlessly smashed the dream of "the kingdom of heaven", you rose up with emotion and wanted to shoulder the danger of the nation with your thin shoulders. The clank and iron bones of the Qing Dynasty held up the precarious wind and rain of the late Qing Dynasty.

However, life can not be satisfactory.When the stubborn giant palm tore the dream of "Reform Reform" to shreds, there was no panic in your resolute eyes. Facing the evil butcher's knife, you looked up to the sky with a long smile and shouted, "If you want to kill a thief, you can't return to heaven. Die well, happy, happy." Die generously.Standing, you are a lonely pine tree with strong bones; when you fall down, you are as majestic as the stretching mountains and rivers.

Facing the incomplete life and unfinished business, you have never regretted it, but embraced the imperfect life with open-mindedness.The moment the butcher's knife falls, what you see is not the approach of death, but the happiness of going to death with your body.This calmness really changed the color of Fengyun and moved the world.

The long wind gradually subsided, and in a trance, I seemed to return to the window again.When I came back to my senses, the moon had already passed through the sky outside the window, and there seemed to be a bright moon rising in my chest, so I hurried to the front of the case and wrote down the infinite emotion in my heart: life will not always be full of flowers, It won't always be cloudless.The petrel in the rainstorm accepted the ruthlessness of the wind and rain before finding a way out in the fight with lightning; the lone pine on the edge of the cliff accepted the oppression of wind and frost before embracing the smooth road in the cliff.The same is true for people. Only when we accept life calmly and love life, we will find that green, fat, red and thin also have a kind of incomplete beauty, and there is a way to live in the storm.

score review
The author uses a technique that transcends time and space, rides on the bright moon in front of him, rides the long wind, and travels through the past and present.Scattered sentence patterns, flying literary talent, such as flowing clouds and flowing water, make the article profound and have a long aftertaste.

wonderful words
The same is true for people. Only when we accept life calmly and love life, we will find that green, fat, red and thin also have a kind of incomplete beauty, and there is a way to live in the storm.

man and road

(a candidate from Jiangsu)

The moss on the wall has grown tall, and there seems to be a little green in the humid air.This is an extremely ancient bluestone road, maybe this kind of road is about to disappear?

The road is not very narrow, certainly not wide.High and low stone slabs and broken stones lead the winding road to one corner after another.

I suddenly thought of Dai Wangshu, his rainy alley, and that girl who looked like a lilac. I really wanted to hold up an oil-paper umbrella and wander alone in this long, long and lonely rainy alley... On this bluestone road, Has it also carried the graceful, hesitant, light and refined steps of a lilac-like girl?Is this bluestone road decades ago as lonely and sad as it is now?There must be a group of naughty children laughing and passing through, I think there must be a few old ladies supporting each other and staggering past, I think there must be a postman with a green parcel on his back riding fast, I think there must be The newspaper delivery boy ran past in a hurry, and I thought, there must be countless lilac-like girls "floating" lightly...

Suddenly I seemed to hear loud and hazy footsteps, I seemed to see a pair of red high heels, bright but not bright, she was wearing a cheongsam with white flowers on a red background, the broken white flowers were intertwined with white threads The shawl is so well matched, she walks Tingting, the pearls on her neck are swaying, and the black curly hair is like a dream in the south of the Yangtze River. At the end of this bluestone road, it suddenly disappeared...

Has such an elegant and sad bluestone road carried the voices and worries of countless literati?There must have been down-and-out scholars, there must have been literati who worried about the country and the people, there must have been homesick wanderers, there must have been sentimental poets...

Suddenly I couldn't help thinking, is it the leisurely and lonely bluestone road that made the Chinese people and Chinese history, or the singing of countless literati, the countless ordinary characters and scenes full of warmth and the smell of the water village? Built an ancient and meaningful bluestone road?
How many entanglements and lingering feelings are there between people and roads?The cultural history of China is originally a series of yellowed photos that record people and roads, maybe there is also humid air, green moss...

Do roads carry people, or do people build roads?The answer may not be so important anymore. It is this deep and gentle road and this sentimental person that make the cultures of water towns have a long history, make China's cultural history shine, and make Chinese history record forever. The sad and melancholy love between people and roads, between roads and people!

score review
The examinee coincidentally opened the chapter with a unique and novel conception. The three choice questions in the last three paragraphs are in-depth. They not only explain the relationship between "people and roads" very accurately, but also elevate the theme to the level of "culture" to understand. And it echoes the modifier "too old to be old" at the beginning.

man and road

(a candidate from Jiangsu)

The composition of the college entrance examination is really a matter of drawing a pen, and then I thought: the method of composition is not like walking on the road.Can't help secretly complacent.

(End of this chapter)