College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 8 Going and Stopping (2)
The point of scoring in this article is to give vivid and appropriate examples.The examples of young people answering questions in "Happy Dictionary" add a lot of color to this article!After the example demonstration, the author cleverly used the metaphor of "climbing a mountain" to further demonstrate the point of view, making the content of the article very substantial.The language is relaxed and fluent, long and short sentences are used alternately, and the reading is brisk.

Celebrity Quotes
Thousands of scouring and thousands of drums are hard work, but after blowing all the sand, you can get to gold. ——Liu Yuxi will be the top of the mountain, looking at all the mountains and small ones. ——Du Fu "Wang Yue"

go and stop

(a candidate from Chongqing)

Life is like traveling. The more dangerous the place is, the more beautiful the scenery is, the more people want to move forward, but people's energy is limited, and they need to stop for a while to move forward better.

Life is like a marathon, you need to replenish energy halfway to be able to run to the finish line.

In real life, after working, many people feel that their knowledge cannot keep up with the development, so they go to study again. This kind of learning is actually a kind of pause, but this kind of pause is for doing better work in the future. A short break is a short stay for faster development in the future.

Looking back at history, Su Qin, a lobbyist in the Warring States Period, failed to lobby for the first time. His sister-in-law saw that he was not promising, and made things difficult for him all day long. Enduring the difficulties of his brother-in-law and his sister-in-law, he began to "hang his head and hurt his bones", and finally succeeded in lobbying the King of Qin, becoming a great strategist in the Warring States Period.Su Qin's forbearance study at home is just a temporary pause on the road of life. This pause is like a flower waiting to bloom. This pause is like a horse grazing grass that accumulates strength. This pause is made to realize one's ideals and ambitions. A short break, this pause, is just a short break for the future to move forward.

Su Qin is not the only one who is good at pausing on the road of life like this?During the Three Kingdoms period, Liu Bei had no choice but to grow vegetables in Cao Cao’s barracks in order to revive the Han Dynasty. It was because he preserved his strength that he made a comeback later.This pause is the choice of the wise.

The journey of life cannot always be smooth sailing. There will always be bumpy thorns. If you want to continue walking, you must pull out the thorns. If you want to pull out the thorns, you may stop. It's better to go behind.We know that many literati and inkmen in history have encountered thorns in life: Qu Yuan, Sima Qian, Ji Kang, Ruan Ji, Li Bai and other literary giants have stopped on the road of life, but this did not affect their pursuit of their ideals. Pursuing their own life goals, their pause is because of the harm of the villain, the stupidity of the king, their pause is for themselves and others to go better, but their rest, their pause is to achieve a greater goal Ideal target.

Therefore, we can say that the pause on the road of life is to go well, go far, and go more grandly!
score review
This article is characterized by rich examples, appropriate details, and strong persuasiveness.The point of view of the article is clear and the intention is lofty.At the beginning, two metaphors were used in succession, and the topic was subtly clarified. Then, in connection with the current discussion, a large number of examples were cited to prove it. Finally, the relationship between walking and stopping was dialectically pointed out.The writing is smooth and impressive.

classic case
Wonderful essays by Su Qin, Liu Bei, Qu Yuan, Sima Qian, Ji Kang, Ruan Ji, and Li Bai

Life is like traveling. The more dangerous the place is, the more beautiful the scenery is, the more people want to move forward, but people's energy is limited, and they need to stop for a while to move forward better.

Life is like a marathon, you need to replenish energy halfway to be able to run to the finish line.

Life is the best when you know the rhythm
(a candidate from Chongqing)

Life is a movement, which needs excitement and the comfort of rest.The movement is beautiful because of the rhythm, and life with rhythm is the most beautiful!

Life is the sea, we need to keep cutting the waves, and we need to find a harbor from time to time; We also need to find a cloud to cuddle with from time to time—on the road of life, we need to keep moving forward, and we need to stop from time to time to gather momentum for the next move forward, stop and go, stop and go, life that understands the rhythm is the best good!

Sad Yifei, I cry for you
It's been about a year, and I still don't want to accept that a talented artist has passed away from our lives.

Do you know how amazing you are!Painting oil paintings, you still maintain the highest social status of Chinese painters; engaging in art design, all of your works are top-notch; making movies, unexpectedly "The Barber" became your farewell work!God is jealous of talents!What is even more unacceptable is that you passed away due to overwork and fell ill.

Yifei, you have achieved so much, why don't you know how to live a more relaxed life?You keep going forward, but you end up falling on the road!Your passing has added another sad name to the list of "Karoshi" in China in 2005. How many people's lives have been clouded and what a disaster has been caused to the entire Chinese art world!

Tears wet the front of my clothes, my tears flow for you, and for those who only care about moving forward and don't know how to stop and rest.

Unrestrained Wang Shi, I applaud you
Maybe the Chinese business community can't find a more convincing example than you.As a CEO, the company you lead is a leader in the industry, which is already envied by many people, and the wonderful life you have outside of work is even more admirable.

You only spend one-third of your year dealing with company affairs, and the rest of the time is spent on leisure to recharge your batteries.So, we saw the picture of you bravely climbing the peaks of the seven continents; we saw your wonderful performance in the Motorola mobile phone advertisement;

Wang Shi, you have proved to us with your wonderful performance in your life that walking and stopping in life can be so harmonious and perfect!
Applause and thunder, my applause, clap for you, and for those who know the rhythm of life.

Life is long and hard, why don't we walk through it calmly, enjoy the beauty of life while walking and stopping, after all, the life that knows the rhythm is the most beautiful!

score review
The title of this article is novel, closely related to the topic, and guides the whole article.The first and second paragraphs at the beginning of the article subtly focus on the topic of "going and stopping", and express a clear point of view poetically: the life that understands the rhythm is the best!In particular, the comprehensive use of rhetorical techniques such as parallelism and metaphor is vivid and expressive, which fully demonstrates the examinee's ability to master language.

classic case
Chen Yifei, Wang Shi

Go and stop options
(a candidate from Chongqing)

Taking history as a mirror, we can know the rise and fall.

--Inscription

There are two choices in the face of difficulties: go and stop.

To go is to work hard, and to paint the gorgeous rainbow in the sky with hard work; to stop is to give up, and to fall into the abyss of failure step by step.

The beacon of history brought us back to the era of war and chaos.

The young King Goujian of Yue stood on the city tower, watching the mighty Wu army rush into the capital of Yue, watching the land behind him fall little by little.Smelling the bloody smell blowing in the wind, Gou Jian threw away his fine clothes and jade food to sleep on his salary and taste his courage. 20 years of hard work, 20 years of hard work in exchange for the retreat of the Wu army, and the cheers of the Vietnamese army on the upper floor of Wudu City.Goujian got out of the predicament with his perseverance and created the miracle of "Three thousand Yuejia can swallow Wu".

The long river of history is still flowing forward...

The garrison called, Hangu lifted, the Chu people lit a torch, and the pitiful scorched earth.The fire in the Afang Palace announced the demise of the Qin Dynasty, and also announced the arrival of another era of amalgamation of heroes.Xiang Yu stood at the forefront of history with his majestic appearance as the overlord of Western Chu.

Good fortune tricks people, but God's will is unpredictable.Even if Xiang Yu has a husband in charge, ten thousand husbands are invincible, his weakness and hesitation still make him besieged on all sides.Facing the surging waters of the Wujiang River, Xiang Yu recalled the heroic ambition of breaking the boat and cutting through the sky, marking the end of the hero's life. Xiang Yu chose to stop, but also chose to fail. There are also eight thousand children who are waiting.

The wheel of history is unstoppable, rolling forward, how many heroes have made choices between walking and stopping.Some people endured humiliation and saw the rainbow after the storm like Gou Jian, but more fell into the abyss of failure.If Xiang Yu did not kill himself in Wujiang, but recharged his energy and made a comeback, the number of winners and losers, the principle of survival, may not be easy to measure.But history is cruel. How can there be success without the courage to go on? Mountains and rivers are full of doubts and there is no way out.
The rolling waters of the Yangtze River flow eastward, and the waves wipe out the heroes, and the success or failure of right and wrong is turned around.Aoyama is still there, How Many Suns.The walking and stopping of heroes in history has become a thing of the past. However, with history as a mirror, we can know the rise and fall. Now let's see how we choose our own walking and stopping, which is of great significance and far-reaching impact!

score review
This article is closely linked, with clear viewpoints and rigorous structure.The full text closely focuses on the topic of "going and stopping", and clarifies that in the face of difficulties, different choices of "going and stopping" have different results, which are related to a person's success or failure.We should use historical figures as a mirror and choose our "go and stop" today.In addition, the selection of the article is typical, the expression is precise, the language is fluent and free, and the reasoning is profound and thorough. It is an excellent composition for the college entrance examination.

classic case
Xiang Yu, Gou Jian

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