College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 94 The Raven and the Eagle (1)
(2006 National Volume 1)

composition test questions
Read the text below and write an article of no less than 800 words as required. (60 points)
An eagle swooped down from the top of the eagle peak and captured a lamb.

A crow saw it, and was very envious, thinking: If only I had such an ability, how great it would be!So the crow imitated the eagle's swooping posture and practiced desperately.

One day, the crow felt that he had practiced well, so he swooped down from the tree and jumped on the back of a goat, trying to catch the goat and fly up, but it was too light, and its claws were entangled in wool. , No matter how much he flapped his wings, he couldn't fly, but was caught by the shepherd.

When the shepherd's child saw it, he asked what kind of bird it was. The shepherd said, "It's a bird that forgot its name." The child touched the crow's feathers and said, "It's also very cute!"

[Notice]

A comprehensive understanding of the material is required, but you can choose a side and an angle to conceive the composition.Determine the idea, style, and title independently; do not deviate from the meaning of the material to compose, do not copy, and do not plagiarize.

Question Analysis
In 2006, the national volume one changed the form of "topic composition" for seven consecutive years, and changed it into a self-determined composition for materials.The key to writing this composition is to think carefully, understand the main idea of ​​the material, and clarify the principles contained in the material. According to the proposition, "comprehend the material comprehensively", base on the overall meaning of the material or "choose a side and an angle to conceive the composition", but " Don't lose sight of the meaning of the material".

When facing a material composition, one must first thoroughly understand the given material and accurately grasp its implication. This is undoubtedly an important prerequisite for writing a good material composition.Obviously, the material given in this question is a fable. There are five images of an eagle, a crow, a goat, a shepherd, and a shepherd’s child. Among them, the eagle and the goat may not be objects worthy of further study. The key sentence is at the end of the material Two words from the shepherd and his child: "This is a bird that forgot its name" and "It is also very cute".From an objective point of view, the shepherd criticized the crow's behavior of being overreaching, ambitious, and imitating others; the shepherd's child affirmed the crow's subjective efforts, and praised the crow's spirit of daring to fight.These two sentences point out the implication of the material, and all derived from it are in line with the intention of the proposition.

Writing Ideas Tips
It can be considered from two perspectives. The first perspective is the perspective of the shepherd: the crow was caught because it did not proceed from its actual situation.From this point of view, the implication is: don’t aim too high and learn to walk in Handan. Even if you learn from excellent role models, you should combine your own conditions and characteristics to develop your own specialties. Don’t make yourself laughable or generous by blindly imitating yourself, or you will end up badly. .The second angle is the angle of the shepherd's child: the crow's spirit of daring to fight and try is also very cute.From the above two angles, the conception is very good, and both of them are in line with the meaning of the question.

Full score sample essay
Life refuses to plagiarize
(a candidate from Henan)

In the examination room, the invigilator will teach us earnestly: "Don't plagiarize during the exam, because you are lying to yourself."

In the composition class, the Chinese teacher will carefully tell us: "Don't copy other people's compositions, but write your own language."

It seems that plagiarism is not welcome in many things, and plagiarizing others may harm you yourself: Although you plagiarized other people's test questions and got high marks, you still can't know what you don't know; became a defendant in court.

Plagiarism is also not welcome in our life, because the life obtained by plagiarism is just a copy of other people's life, which can hardly be called wonderful, let alone of much value.However, many of us are so keen on "copying" others that we even want to copy ourselves into someone we admire.Seeing that some singers become famous overnight, they spend a lot of time and energy on practicing their voices, body, and even plagiarizing their clothes, speech and behavior without asking whether they have the qualifications. If someone says to them, "You Much like someone" is the best compliment for him.His whole body has become someone else, except himself.These people are more like the crow that imitated the eagle to grab the sheep - when the crow saw the eagle rushing down from the high peak and quickly picked up a sheep, it must be full of envy Well, it must wish to be a bird like an eagle, otherwise, it wouldn't practice diving hard, and then screaming and rushing down from the tree to grab the sheep.What was the result?Not only did the crow fail to catch the sheep, but was caught by the shepherds instead; how many of those who blindly worship idols, imitate idols, and "copy" idols stand on the stage of success like idols?Yes, our young hearts are hungry for success.We don't want our life to be mediocre, but before we take action to realize our ideals, we must first figure out whether we are suitable for that road; when we plan to become a singer, we must consider our voice ; when we aspire to be writers, we should consider our own writing talent; Be sure to consider whether you have similar development potential as him.If not, then let our envy be nothing but envy.

Yes, in this complicated world, there are many people and things that we can envy.Many times, this envy is also one of the motivations for our efforts.Many people we envy are indeed worth learning, but this kind of learning cannot be simple imitation, low-level "plagiarism".The crow must learn the words of the eagle, it can learn the bravery of the eagle soaring to the sky, it can learn the heroism of the eagle tossing in the empty valley, it can learn the perseverance of the eagle in the face of severe tests, the only thing it does not want to learn is "holding the sheep" - that is lack of Crows cannot learn the strength of claws and strength, it will only make people laugh, and it will only make them fall into the predicament of being caught by the shepherd.

Similarly, we can learn other people's writing skills, we can learn other people's learning methods, we can learn the hard work of singers before they became famous, but we can't copy other people's compositions, and we can't completely copy other people's answers. Going to learn how to sing from singers, let alone how to dress up, how to speak and how to behave.Because, that's not called learning, that's called plagiarism.Birds in the sky and ants in the ground each have their own lives. We do not reject the ordinary, but we must refuse plagiarism in our lives!

score review
This article is an excellent work in the examination room, with excellent conception and writing.Candidates first listed various common "plagiarism" phenomena in daily life, organically combined examples and reasoning, deeply analyzed the disadvantages of various plagiarism, and clarified the arguments of this article.The title of this article is also the center of the full text, and it also plays the role of finishing touch.The article is a rare masterpiece of argumentation in the examination room.

fallen beauty
(A Candidate from Shaanxi)

Kuafu fell down, reflecting the red brilliance of the sun, and died of thirst in Yanggu.

There was no loud noise, he exhausted his strength on the day-by-day journey, his pace gradually slowed down, stopped, and fell quietly on the cracked ground.

I don't know why he went on the road, maybe it was the miracle of Nuwa mending the sky, maybe it was the feat of Jingwei reclamation - he decided to chase the sun because he yearned for the kind of struggle with natural forces.In my mind is the glory and joy of chasing the sun, so much so that I have completely forgotten the fate of Nuwa being disillusioned in the sky and Jingwei being buried in the East China Sea.Or he remembers it, but he still confidently believes in his own ability, and believes that he will eventually be in his hands.

But he should know that he is old, otherwise he wouldn't be chasing the sun.Youth itself is the sun.He doesn't think that old age can stop the pace of progress. He knows that the end point is there, and he keeps running. Wherever he can't run, that is the end point.

In his cloudy eyes is the burning sun, the sun that comes out of Fusang and falls into the sea.He took off his worn-out straw sandals and ran on the road chasing the sun.

The heat spreads all over the body, and the scenery becomes more and more desolate: the trees have lost all their branches and leaves, leaving only curled old branches;Kuafu is not afraid, he just takes steps.

Step by step, he heard the sound of Nuwa's efforts to push the boulder up to the sky and shattered in the torrent of the collapsed sky. He didn't give up, he couldn't.

Step by step, he heard the roar and hiss of the Jingwei bird being torn apart by the strong wind when it hovered over the huge waves. He didn't give up, and he couldn't either.

He raised his head and drank up the water of the Wei River.He raised his head and drank up the water of the Yellow River.He was still running, toward his sun.

How I want him to stop, turn around, and go back to his tribe.I couldn't do that, I just watched him take three steps in parallel, and then, suddenly, stopped before the one step he hadn't taken yet.

He fell down, and in Yangu, the red sun cast a halo around his fallen body.His fallen posture is like an eagle with outstretched wings, full of strength.

I have never seen such a magnificent fall to the ground, the sunset is silent, and the west wind is still blowing his body.

Twilight recedes, falling into the setting sun.He still hasn't caught up with the sun, has he?

His cane turned into a peach grove, and in the shade of the peach trees, there will always be someone who speaks boldly every day, someone who will run to the farthest distance towards the sun, and someone who will fall down beautifully in the setting sun—— Fall on the land of heroes with the beauty of an eagle.

Some people will still laugh at the crows who pretend to be eagles, but they will become divine birds even if they fall; some people will still laugh at Kuafu who runs, but his posture when he falls makes him a godly magnificence.

score review
The student cleverly used the analogy to compare the crow to Kuafu. He did not directly discuss the behavior of the crow, but indirectly expressed his theme through the analysis of Kuafu chasing the sun, which is quite similar.

Liu Bei's Commandment Book

(A Candidate from Hebei Province)

My son Liu Chan:

Recently, I have been in a trance for my father, there are very few solar eclipses, and my body is getting thinner day by day, and I am afraid that the deadline will come.While I am still alive, there are a few words to warn me.I hope you can recognize yourself, restore the Central Plains as soon as possible, and fulfill your father's lifelong wish.

Although I was born in the market, but as a descendant of the Liu family, I never forget to wipe out the traitors and revive the prestige of my Han Dynasty.In the zodiac, the Yellow Turban thieves are mighty, raising the banner of anti-Han.I clearly realize that I am alone and alone, and I can't take it from a county, regardless of the world.Although I have the ability to govern the world, I only hate having no rights and no capital.But heaven does not hide good men, I met your two uncles in the market, Yide has a lot of money, so the three of us hit it off right away, and we became brothers with different surnames in Taoyuan.Forge weapons, recruit volunteers, and start conquests.Since then, the three of my brothers have ruled the world, and the strength of these two is also unnecessary.

From now on, my fate will be ill-fated and I will not live in a fixed place. Although I have a place of size, I have few soldiers and few generals. I can't defend against the tiger and wolf divisions Cao Cao, Yuan Shao, and Lu Bu.I have to bow to others and wait for the time to move.My wisdom is enough to guard a city and govern a county. If I wipe out the whole world, I will not be able to.Fortunately, I met Kong Ming, who knew three parts of the world before he came out of the hut. This man's talent is a thousand times better than mine.If I get this person, I will feel like a fish in water, like a tiger with wings added.I asked Mr. to be my teacher because of the affection of three times, so I joined forces with Wu to resist Cao, occupied Jingzhou, defeated barbarians in the south, and occupied Western Shu in the north. I became king in Shu, all thanks to this man.I see myself correctly, so I succeed.

My son, don't be proud, don't be unrealistic, you must recognize yourself and the situation, otherwise you will suffer a lot.In the past, when Cao Cao defeated Yuan Shao and killed Lu Bu, no one in the world dared to stop him.The reason for his success is that he can see himself correctly, ask for advice with an open mind, and not be blindly arrogant.But once he has the power of size, he will be trapped by arrogance, so when Puyang attacked Lu Bu, when Wancheng fought Zhangxiu, Chibi met Zhou Lang, Huarong met Guan Yu, seized the boat to avoid arrows in Weishui, cut his beard and abandoned Robed at Tongguan, the state of distress is beyond words. Your uncle, Guan Yu, the leader of the Five Tigers, did not listen to the strategy of Wu Kangcao, who was united with the military divisions. He said "My tiger girl can match a dog" not only lost Jingzhou, Lost his own life.Even your father failed to recognize himself and the situation, and was burned by Lu Xun's children for seven hundred miles.The lesson is painful, my son, after my death, you must regard the military master as your father. The military master is loyal and wise, and great things can be trusted. My defeat this time has greatly injured my vitality in Sichuan. Policy, don't forget that Wu Cao is still eyeing me.

My son, remember to always recognize yourself and treat yourself correctly. The prosperity of the Han Dynasty depends entirely on you. I hope you will remember, remember!

Father: Liu Bei
Baidi in 226 AD
score review
The student cleverly borrowed the old title of Zhuge Kongming's "Book of Commandments" to describe Liu Bei's new story of "Tuo Gu", which is novel in form and profound in meaning, which is admirable.In the writing, the personnel and affairs of the Three Kingdoms are readily available, quoted from many sources, and moderately retracted, which shows the student's superb language skills.

two letters

(a candidate from Henan)

([-]) The first letter

Cang Hai laughed:

Hello, I feel very sad, so I take up a pen to chat with you.The hazy sky outside the window is the same as my mood, gray and far-fetched.

Why is it always me who fails.

I'm a hard worker, and everyone knows it.At three o'clock, the lights are brightly lit at five o'clock, and the days when the head is hanging from the beam and the cone is piercing the buttocks accompany me through the flower season.I love painting so much, each piece of white paper is colored and changed under my hands, and each piece of work contains my hard work and sweat.But evaluations like "mediocre, dim, pale, and plain" pierced my heart again and again.Shouldn't I really have gorgeous colors in my life?
I am persistent, and everyone knows it.In February, apricot blossoms and eight bay laurel, the years of the stars and the moon accompanied me through my youth.I love music so much, notes fly out of my voice and float, and every singing is soaked with my emotions and ideals.However, evaluations such as "thin, boring, dull, and messy" made me despair again and again.Is it doomed not to have a graceful singing voice in my life?
Is my pursuit wrong?Is my effort wrong?Is my struggle wrong?
blue sky cry

×year×month×day

([-]) Second letter
The blue sky cries a hundred times:
Hello, after receiving your letter, my mood can't help but sink a lot because of you.That thin page of paper has been silent on my desk for many days, but my heart has been churning for a long time.Today, on such a cloudless and sunny day, I write to you to reply.May my One Leaf Feihong dispel the haze covering your heart.

My dear friend, I want to say that there is nothing wrong with your pursuit!There is nothing wrong with your efforts!There is nothing wrong with your hard work!Your fault is that you did not find your own position, you did not grasp your own strength, and you did not recognize your own strengths and weaknesses.

(End of this chapter)