College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 99: Associations and perceptions from poems (1)
(2006 Shandong roll)

composition test questions
Read the poem below and write a composition as required.

star
Lei Shuyan

Those who look up at the stars,

I always thought stars were gems,
Crystal clear, translucent, without blemishes.

Those who fly to the stars know,

There is dust, gravel,
As complex as it is on Earth.

Reading this poem can produce different associations and perceptions.Please write an article based on your association or perception.

[Notice]

①Association or perception should be related to the meaning of the whole poem. ② Make up your own mind and draw up your own topic. ③ No less than 800 words. ④ There is no limit to the style of writing except poetry.

Question Analysis
In 2006, Shandong Province's college entrance examination composition test changed the form of "topic composition" in previous years to "material composition", and the material given was a relatively simple modern poem, allowing students to make different associations and perceptions , so that the scope of the examinee's intention to review the questions is closer to the examinee's life.

The creation background of the modern poet Lei Shuyan's work "Stars" is the early stage of reform and opening up, a period of transition from illusion to reality.People often compare the things they like to the stars, and the strong love often makes people forget to think calmly, so that they are blinded by charming illusions.This little poem tells people that the reality is complicated, and there are "dust and gravel".Regarding "Stars", the stem of the title says "reading this poem can produce different associations and perceptions".Since ancient times, "poetry cannot be understood", this sentence is easy to understand.However, when examinees notice the prompt in the above sentence, they should also "note" that "association or perception should be related to the meaning of the whole poem".In other words, candidates' associations and perceptions are not far-fetched, but need to be well-founded, which is the meaning of the poem "Star".Once you understand this, it will not be difficult to write again.

Writing Ideas Tips
The ideas of the examination questions can be roughly divided into three categories: 1. Distance produces beauty.The reason why people think that the stars are gems and beautiful is that they are very far away from the stars. Once people get in close contact with them or the distance is very close, people will find that the stars are far from what they imagined. The surface is bumpy and full of dust... Similarly, it can also be associated with lovers. When the two parties are not very familiar with each other, at this time, no matter how you look at the other party, you will feel that the other party is beautiful, which is the so-called "beauty is in the eye of the beholder", but , when you really understand the other person, you will also find that the other person is not so beautiful, and he/she also has many shortcomings; 2. Look at the essence through the phenomenon.People are often confused by the beautiful appearance and fail to realize the essence of the phenomenon, just like treating beautiful stars. 3. Ideal and reality. "People who look up at the starry sky always think that the stars are gems, crystal clear, translucent, and without flaws." This is the ideal star of people, but the real star is "dusty, gravel, and as complicated as the earth."This is the gap between ideal and reality, and candidates can also start topics from this angle.

Full score sample essay
A letter to classmate Meng Huan
(a candidate from Shandong)

Classmate Meng Huan:

Hello!Originally I didn't want to reply to your letter, but considering that you must be eagerly looking forward to receiving a few words from me, and also considering the need to communicate with you and unify our understanding, I wrote the following text.

You said that the moment you saw me, you were conquered by my innocence.You think innocence is a kind of beauty.You said it was when I transferred to the second grade (3) class, the teacher led me into the classroom, I was wearing a lotus-colored blouse, smiling, and sat on my seat under the gaze of my classmates. At this time, you seem to know what innocence is for the first time.In the days to come, the tone of my voice, the way I walk, the way I answer questions, etc., you say you will be appreciated by you.You have thought about it for a long time and wanted to talk to me, but you never did because you have low self-esteem.But you are always unwilling to miss making me this friend, so you have this letter.

I said, in fact, you don't know me.Because of this, when you look at me from a distance, you feel that I am the most beautiful idol in your heart.I am careless, I care about saving face, I am self-willed, I have a small belly, and I have the weakness common to all little girls-love to cry.When I say this, you might call me humble.No, if you date me for a while, you will not be able to accept me because of these weaknesses, and you will say: How could this person be like this?I have several girlfriends, all because of these shortcomings of mine, from the intimacy and brotherhood in the past to the stranger now.I have been introspecting and trying to correct these weaknesses, but I can't, maybe it will take time!

To be honest, when I received your letter, I was also very excited when I was young.There are people who appreciate me!I can't help but feel a little flustered.So, I started to pay attention to you, your clothes, your words and deeds, and even your momentary expression, feeling that you meet the standard of a handsome guy, but when I was introspecting, I suddenly realized that this is also the result of my watching you from a distance, I can't make a naive mistake in the wrong season because of the beauty produced by this long-distance viewing.

In fact, as boys and girls, the reason why we fall in love with each other easily has a lot to do with our understanding besides the reason of physiological development.We really cannot regard the beauty produced by distance as the essence of things.Realizing this, we will be much calmer and more objective, and we will do things less blindly, so that we can put all our energy on learning and make our learning even better.

What do you say?I believe that after receiving my letter, you will also reflect on it and agree with my point of view.Finally, I send you a little poem for encouragement: Those who look up at the starry sky/Always think that the stars are gems/Glittering, translucent, and flawless.

Those who fly to the stars know / there is dust, gravel / as complicated as on earth.

The title of this poem is "The Stars", and the author is the well-known contemporary poet Lei Shuyan who wrote "The Grass Is Singing".

Xx
Nov. 2006, 6

score review
The examinee was ingenious, and vividly showed the story of a girl who received a love letter from a male classmate and replied to the boy through the epistolary style.Through this sincere "reply letter", the examinee expressed the idea that the beauty produced by distance is not the essence of things.Candidates can combine their own analysis, and thus infer themselves and others, which not only expresses the theme, but also conforms to the meaning of the question.In addition, the author quotes Lei Shuyan's poems at the end to point out the topic. Because the quotation is more natural and appropriate, it adds vitality to the article.

Come back home
(a candidate from Shandong)

He still remembers, 20 years ago, a lot of banknotes, two pairs of rough hands, two haggard faces and a heart longing for the outside world, so he chose to go out of the window, determined not to wander in the mountains...

Yes, he left the beautiful mountains and rivers here, left the industrious and simple villagers here, left his parents, and rushed to the outside of the mountain - the alluring brilliant lights.

In fact, with his ability, he is fully capable of opening up his own life path in the mountains.Opening mountains and planting trees and forests can make him famous; the exotic flowers and fruits all over the mountains and plains are enough to make him rich.But in his eyes, this place is barren, because his dream is not here, but outside the mountain.

When he got out of the mountain, he discovered the world where his dreams were released, and he was fascinated by the splendor and bustling outside. He thought that yes, he could carve out his own world here.

More than ten years have slipped through his fingers in the blink of an eye, and he has become a real boss through his continuous efforts.Dressed in BMW costumes, sitting in a BMW car, surrounded by a few secretaries who are good at observing words and expressions, galloping beautifully on the large and wide asphalt road, with a radiant face.

However, gradually, gradually, he began to be a little confused and at a loss by the intertwined and flashing colorful neon lights.There was an inexplicable empty feeling in his heart.His head was also dizzy, and he was a little tired of city life.

Huh?Oh, there are dense trees on the high mountain, fish swimming freely in the water, and beautiful and colorful blooming flowers in the green grass.The pictures that I never cared about floated up one after another in my heart, which was tired of intrigues, and actually brushed away some dust in my heart.

He remembered, before leaving, his parents' increasingly haggard faces, the calloused hands worn out by life, and their exhortations before they left: "I don't want to stay outside anymore, let's go home, ah!"

Silently, silently, he sobbed.

There is a tree outside the window, and a bird's nest was built on the tree at some time, the birds flew away, looking back at the home they used to live in as if nostalgic, and flew away with a few flutters.He wept again, why didn't he miss his family, his parents and the landscape of his hometown at that time?He seemed to see the light that wished him to return in the dim eyes of his parents.He decided to go home.

score review
This is a rare masterpiece of narrative narrative in the examination room.Candidates mainly focus on narration, as well as description, discussion, lyricism, psychological description of characters, and use of foil techniques (the last paragraph), all of which are also very successful.The author sticks to the word "distance" and reveals the theme of "distance produces beauty".

keep watch
- our paradise
(a candidate from Shandong)

The moon is the hometown of the ancients and the longing of the confidant.The sacred halo, which is so far away and untouchable, turns into the soul in the poet's writing, and the chant in his mouth.Dongpo said: I hope that people will live a long time and share the joys and joys of thousands of miles away.

Armstrong took people's months away.The footprints printed on the sand dunes made Li Taibai's drinking alone under the moon a history. Perhaps human beings have got rid of the ignorance of the past, and the distance is not as far away as it used to be. However, the glowing jade plate hanging in the sky has faded. It is the distance of the ancients, giving birth to the once crescent moon.

I hate the close distance, the dream that is close at hand, I don't want it.When sweating like rain in the scorching heat, the ivory tower in the dream is my only fulcrum.I imagined its grandeur as heavenly.Although everyone will have a realistic side, but I firmly believe that distance creates distance, and distance creates beauty.The unattainable constitutes the ideal sanctity.Spreading my five fingers, the dazzling light reflects the appearance of heaven, and I watch alone.The ideal is crystal clear like gems.Watching from afar, it is my paradise.I like the beauty of distortion, like the moon of the ancients.

I accidentally thought of Haizi, the legendary poet who was always cynical.When his "facing the sea, the spring is warm and the flowers are blooming" became an illusion like a Greek myth, Haizi was speechless.In his eyes, the whole world looks like the beautiful flowers blooming in the Garden of Eden from a distance, but only when he looks closely can he realize the disappointment this world has given him.The sea can't keep him, and neither can spring. The wings of poetry are broken, and only the iron wheels of Shanhaiguan pass rumbling.Someone asked what hurt him and the poets of this era.People may not understand, because they are in this world and have never seen its beauty from afar.The distance between literati and the world is always too great, and the contrast is too great.In the raging flames of Haizi's burning poetry collection, a world facing the sea and blooming in spring blossoms.This distance is tragedy, the eyes of the goddess of literature.The world of distant and close view makes Haizi complete the essential transformation between heaven and hell.I think Haizi, who still insists on looking at the world from afar, will be happy forever.

This is the beauty of distance.Being in the chaotic world forever makes human beings numb and even forget the suffocating beauty when viewed from a distance.When trying to build the so-called "beautiful life", have human beings forgotten the distant watch, the heaven they once had when they were children, the tears of the moon in ancient poems, and the angel with wings in Greek mythology?The development of science has relaxed the last sharp nerve of human beings, and all poetry has disappeared, leaving only the prosperity of the secular world flowing.

Look at the moon in the sky, look at the romantic "Qinshi Mingyue and Hanshiguan", watch the reality of the humanistic spirit in the era of "wild civilization", look at the suffocating beauty brought to us by the distance, poetry, Prose and Chu Ci will nourish the numbness of this era, and the distant beauty will let us rekindle the myth of hope, and the spiritual ship will set sail again.

Watching the distance, watching the sky only belongs to our eternity...

score review
The student expressed the view that "distance produces beauty" through Haizi and other examples; through the method of comparison, the rejection of close distance is strengthened.The point of view is clear and the position is clear.The use of rhetorical questions effectively strengthens the tone and enhances the strength of the article.The writing of the article is fluent and the language is beautiful, which shows the profound cultural accumulation of the candidates.

wonderful words
The moon is the hometown of the ancients and the longing of the confidant.The sacred halo, which is so far away and untouchable, turns into the soul in the poet's writing, and the chant in his mouth.

The sea can't keep him, and neither can spring. The wings of poetry are broken, and only the iron wheels of Shanhaiguan pass rumbling.

Gardenias by the window sill
(a candidate from Shandong)

In life, we often ignore the gardenias by the window lattice, and imagine that the flowers in the garden next door must be more fragrant, just like we obviously live on a star, but always think that the stars in the night sky are crystal clear like gems bright.In the long life, don't we always think that our own life is always full of ups and downs and thorns, while others' lives are always full of flower-like fragrance? !However, no one can refuse pain, and no life does not burn the scars of pain.Deep pain may also be hidden in other people's smiles, but in the silent dark night, you have never heard his whimpering cry.

Have you ever envied Dongpo's life?Yes, he traveled to Chibi, drank drunk in the mountains and forests, and wrote passionate words that will shine for thousands of years.However, do you see the scars in his heart?As a person, he shouldered the expectation of becoming a general and becoming a prime minister, and sealing his wife and son, but he was relegated one after another.His injustice, his depression, his pain, his helplessness, have you seen it?

Yes, you ignored the pain in Su Shi’s life, only saw his halo, saw the world’s respect and praise for him, so you envied his life, so you hated the paleness of your own life.When will you know how to appreciate yourself and smell the fragrance of gardenias by the window?
Have you ever envied Tao Yuanming's life?Yes, he retreated to the countryside, tasted light country wine, watched the cold chrysanthemums in the wind, how chic and comfortable he lived!However, do you feel the helplessness in his heart?He also had the ambition of helping others, but he couldn't show it. In that dark era, he couldn't tolerate this strong Wei and Jin character, so he chose to be born out of endless helplessness.Do you understand his helplessness, his anxiety, his pain?
Yes, you have never seen that you only care about smelling the fragrance of the chrysanthemum before Mr. Wuliu’s house, and you only care about being intoxicated with the landscape of Nanshan, so you envy their lives, and at the same time complain about the anxiety and fatigue of your own life.When will you know how to face up to the joy of your own life and smell the fragrance of gardenias by the window lattice?
Don't always think that your life is full of suffering, while others' lives are full of sunshine. Everyone will experience the suffering in life, and you will also have traces of joy in the unsatisfactory life.

Face up to one's own life, appreciate one's own destiny, and be indifferent and calm even if one's fate is ill-fated.In the river of history, there is no ship that is not injured.I hope that when you wake up tomorrow morning, you can smell the gardenias on the window lattice with a smile on your face. The human face and the gardenias complement each other, which may constitute the most beautiful scenery in the world.

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