Why is the health bar displayed in the world?

An incomprehensible light novel title.

Li Mo took a sip of tea and started flipping through it. This should be what Zaimokuza brought. It seems that this is his original manuscript. Judging from the printed text, it should be printed out.

Well, the title is long. But you will be disappointed at first sight.

Then she was noticed by Yukinoshita next to her, and she asked, "What are you looking at?"

Chapter 127 Comments

Yukinoshita Yukino could conclude that what Li Mo was looking at now was not possessed by the members of the Service Club.

In other words, that was what Zaimokuza brought.

Li Mo looked up at Yukinoshita, got the information he wanted from her, and said, "A light novel, it seems to be a light novel that has not been published yet. Let me think... recently, I remember that a certain library is going to hold a newcomer award. Zaimokuza, do you want to take this to participate in the newcomer award?"

The communication between Zaimokuza and Hikigaya has been interrupted.

When Yukinoshita asked and Li Mo answered, everyone in the room looked at Li Mo. Among them, Zaimokuza's gaze was the most important. He stared at the manuscript in Li Mo's hand, but did not dare to move, as if his comic book had been confiscated by the teacher.

This is his thing.

"Zaimokuza, don't be nervous. Can you please answer my question?"

"Yes, yes. I am going to enter the Newcomer Award, but I am afraid that the editor will reject my work, so I want to find someone to take a look at it."

No more words were needed, in front of Li Mo, Zaimokuza naturally returned to his normal speaking level.

The other party has seen through me, what else can I say?

"Isn't there some novel submission website? Why don't you try it?" Hikigaya asked.

Zaimokuza said, "No, the people above are too harsh in their comments."

"But I think Yukinoshita's comments are even more vicious than that." Hikigaya complained.

Yukinoshita looked at the situation in a daze.

Things like light novels and submission websites are beyond her knowledge area.

Li Mo said: "Hikigaya-san, Yukinoshita-san's evaluation is more fair."

But no matter what, reading Zaimokuza's manuscript became one of the tasks of the Servant Club. If you think about it carefully, Zaimokuza was also introduced by Hiratsuka Shizuka. At this point, all the commissions of the Servant Club were introduced by Hiratsuka teacher.

——So Yukinoshita-san really doesn’t want to find a quiet activity room to read?

After returning home, Li Mo did the same thing as yesterday, studying the text, researching Yin-Yang techniques, and tinkering with his Shikigami. He wanted to see if he could turn his Shikigami into his own household maid. Cooking and cleaning by himself was still too hard.

In addition, the universality of Weishen Yin-Yang Technique in this world needs to be explored. In Li Mo's perception, there is no elemental force in the air of this world, or the elements of this world are not as active as those in the original world.

These are all things he wants to study on his own.

The next day.

Sobu High School.

It was after school in the afternoon. Li Mo and Yukinoshita came to the activity room first, and then Li sat in his seat, looking at the manuscript that he had not finished reading during class.

"Didn't you watch it yesterday?"

"I haven't read it. How can I read such boring stuff? Well, it doesn't even qualify me to kill time in class. Well...anyway, I read ten lines at a glance and I'm almost done." Li Mo said, supporting his cheek.

Zaimokuza's writing is surprisingly boring. There are a lot of settings and nouns in it, but there is no explanation. It's confusing. The characterization is thin and the plot is boring. It's basically a turn-based game, encountering enemies, fighting, and defeating enemies. Otherwise, it's just a lot of talking about settings and background.

I would rather attend class than watch this kind of stuff.

"As a member of the Service Club, it is not right to have such a perfunctory attitude when helping others." Yukinoshita Yukino was very sleepy, but even so she still pulled herself together and told Li Mo about her values.

Li Mo said, "I'm very serious. If I put this thing in the hands of an editor, it would be rejected after only the first few hundred words. Yukinoshita-san, you have to believe me. I've read a lot of novels."

He had a sincere expression, a very serious look on his face.

Yukinoshita Yukino doesn't understand the field of light novels and can only be half awake and half suspicious.

Fortunately, the real owner came.

Hikigaya and Yuigahama arrived late.

The seating arrangement was very clear. The four members of the Service Club were Yui Higashihama, Hachiman Hikigaya, Li Mo, and Yukinoshita Yukino from left to right. Zaimokuza sat in the middle of the long table.

It's a bit like a three-court trial.

Li Mo threw away these unnecessary emotions and asked, "Are you in high spirits, Yukinoshita-san? How about you be the first to make the evaluation?"

"can."

Yukinoshita Yukino nodded.

Zaimokuza's attention immediately focused on Yukinoshita, waiting for her response.

"Boring." Yukinoshita gave a fair evaluation.

"For the first time, I found reading a painful and extremely boring thing."

"There are a lot of grammatical problems. Why are there so many inverted sentences?"

"The usage of 'de di de' is not correct. Why do we need to use so many superscripts? What's the point?"

“The most important thing is that the story isn’t even finished.”

"Apart from wasting paper, what value does this story have?"

Telling the truth is the most precious quality of Yukinoshita Yukino. Even if the truth hurts, she will still do it. This straightforward character is the hallmark of Yukinoshita.

Zaimokuza covered his heart, as if Yukinoshita's words turned into sharp arrows, piercing his heart.

"As per the principle of ladies first, what do you think, Yuigahama-san?"

"Um...you know a lot of rare characters."

Zaimokuza was injured a second time.

Everyone knows that light novels are entertainment works, popular works for the general public. They are meant to be understood by more people, and too many uncommon characters make it difficult for people to appreciate the story, which is a big taboo.

"Then, Hikigaya-san?" Li Mo said.

"Hikigaya, you're my best friend." Zaimokuza wailed.

"Zaimokuza, just tell me straight, which light novel did you copy the plot from?"

"Oh————no!!!" Zaimokuza was betrayed by his best friend. He leaned back in his chair, unable to recover for a long time.

Being backstabbed by an outsider is one thing, but being backstabbed by your best friend is even more painful.

Li Mo patted the table and said, "Okay, the review meeting is over now."

"Li-san, you haven't commented yet?"

"Is it necessary? Zaimokuza..."

Li Mo saw Zaimokuza's eyes, which looked like, "Just say it, I can accept anything."

Yukinoshita, Hikigaya, and Yuigahama were also looking at him.

"Is it because you, Mr. Li, haven't read the entire book so you can't comment on it? You can't?" Yukinoshita said.

Li Mo said, "How is that possible! Just say it."

"First, let's talk about the title. It's unclear. It's long enough, but what does it say? Readers have no idea what your book is about. It doesn't explain the core of the story, the selling points of the characters, and even the golden finger is not reflected."

“The story is old-fashioned and the writing is seriously fragmented. The ending of the previous story is not explained clearly before the next story starts. There are also various settings explained in between.”

"The heroine is portrayed in a mediocre way, rigid, and has few scenes. There are few benefits. She is obsessed with the fighting scenes that she has set up. More importantly, the setting is still very mediocre."

"There is no plot, and no benefits. May I ask, what is your highlight? I will be rejected after reading the first 300 words."

Zaimokuza was defeated.

Chapter 128: Lack of Knowledge

"Is it really okay for us to say Zaimokuza like this?"

The four members of the Service Club gave the most pertinent evaluation of Zaimokuza's novel plaintiff. Pertinent, equal to reality, equal to slow slander.

Reality is just so unreasonable.

But among the four people, Yuigahama Yui was the only one who felt ashamed. She also said this.

The other three people didn't feel anything about Zaimokuza's painful expression. As the saying goes, you get what you ask for, and it was his own fault that it had come to this.

Li Mo holds this view.

Hikigaya said, "It's okay. Zaimokuza won't die like this."

"Did it jump directly to the point of death?!" Yuigahama complained.

Yukinoshita said, "I didn't touch on the light novel aspect. Li-san, do you have anything else to say?"

"What I wanted to say... I just kept finding faults. I do have a suggestion, Zaimokuza, can you think about your own selling point? Even if you're selling toilet paper with illustrations, you should give the female characters as many roles as possible and give them benefits."

Have you ever seen a pig run before you have eaten pork? As a reader, I used to read online novels and light novels, and only then could I be considered healthy.

……

……

"Zaimokuza, is it really okay to perform like this?" This time, it was Yukinoshita Yukino who asked the question.

After a while, everyone came out of the activity room and went back to their homes.

Zaimokuza walked in front of the four people, and when the group was still on the stairs, Zaimokuza stood on the flat playground, sitting in a movement that Yukinoshita couldn't understand, which made the girl wonder if the other party had suffered too much of a blow, and thus was mentally traumatized and went crazy.

Li Mo responded: "Didn't Zaimokuza say that we were a great help to him before? Not really, this is just a normal manifestation of Chuunibyou. When I was a kid, I liked to swing a wooden stick around, imagining that I was the Monkey King exorcising demons and monsters. This is one of the romances of boys.

Don't you agree, Hikigaya-san?"

He didn't mind exposing his dark history. It's normal for boys to fantasize about these things.

Yuigahama Yui approached Hikigaya and said, "Kentaka, Kentaka, is that so?"

"Of course... yes." Hikigaya said.

He didn't understand how Li Mo could talk about his dark history without any expression. When he thought of the mess he had written, he didn't have the courage to speak out. In fact, his first reaction when he was discovered was to kill him.

Of course, if Komachi discovered it, we can just pretend nothing happened.